Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The table provide on the number of fatal,serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in the region of great britain with in the time frame of 9 years starts from 1998 to end of 2007.
Overall,we observe 3 different cases,i.e fatal,serious,slight by using guns and knifes are weapons.And we observe total cases are increased year by year.
Starts with the year 1998 the total cases are 864 in this slight 653,serious 162 and fatal 49 all cases are gradually increase every year.
Comparing these fetal cases are less than serious and slight in every year upto 2007.
coming to the incerase rate of total cases in proportion is 342%. In this 18% of fettal cases,194% of serious and 405% slight cases are increases .Finally, total number of slight cases are increased rapidly than remaning two cases and slight cases starts with 653 in 1998 and reaches 3296 at the end of 2007
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the data, such as the overall increase in crime and the specific trends for fatal, serious, and slight injuries. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you mention the total percentage increase and the individual categories, the reporting of specific data points is occasionally inaccurate or confusingly phrased (e.g., '194% of serious'). To reach a higher band, ensure that data is presented with greater precision and that comparisons between categories are more clearly articulated. The overview is present but lacks a sophisticated synthesis of the trends shown in the table.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by awkward transitions and repetitive sentence structures. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'And we observe' or 'Starts with'. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks a clear progression of ideas. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and phrases to connect sentences and ideas more naturally, ensuring that the relationship between the data points is clear to the reader.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety expected at higher bands. There are several spelling errors, such as 'fetal' instead of 'fatal', 'knifes' instead of 'knives', and 'incerase'. Additionally, the phrasing is often informal or imprecise, such as 'coming to the incerase rate'. To improve, you should focus on using more academic vocabulary related to data description (e.g., 'witnessed a significant rise', 'accounted for', 'proportionally') and ensure that you are using the correct terminology for the data provided.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('The table provide'), incorrect verb tenses ('cases are increased'), and missing articles or prepositions. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and spacing. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and proofreading for common errors in tense and word form. Increasing the variety of sentence structures while maintaining accuracy will also help raise your score.
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