Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The table demonstrate ratio of fatal, serious and slight injuries caused by gun and knife experienced by the citizen of Great Britain. also surprisingly the figures kept increasing from 1988 to 2007
The statistical analysis of individuals being injured in three different ways by either gun or knife in shown in the table. over the period of 9 the percentage kept growing. the amount of fatal injuries fluctuates and marks lowest among the rest. while serios and slight injuries doubles over the time span. however this integer drops to zero in year 2006-07
From the year 1998-99 Marely 49 death are reported followed by 162 serios and 653 slight injuries. by 2002 the amount reaches its peak at 95 take a dip in 2006 then again reach 58 in the final year. as for serious damage, the ratio gradually rose to its peak value 476 by year 2006 with slight drop in the previous year.
the section that takes the lion's share are slight accidents. the digits rose dramatically every passing year while the figures rocketed by year 2006 from 1862 in year 2003 to 3296 in year 2006. overall percentage comparison of various years is shown. it illustrated a stark contrast between slight injuries and total number of injuries.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the data, including the trends for fatal, serious, and slight injuries. However, the analysis is inconsistent. For example, you mention that serious and slight injuries 'double' over the period, but the data provided in the table does not consistently support this claim. Furthermore, there are inaccuracies in reporting the data, such as stating that the integer drops to zero in 2006-07, which is not reflected in the provided statistics. To improve, ensure that your summary of the data is precise and that you clearly distinguish between the trends and the specific figures provided in the table.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, which helps with the overall structure. However, the logical progression is often hindered by mechanical and sometimes confusing use of cohesive devices. For instance, the transition 'also surprisingly' at the start is informal and poorly placed. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as when you refer to 'this integer' without a clear antecedent. Additionally, the punctuation is inconsistent, with many sentences starting with lowercase letters and lacking proper sentence boundaries, which disrupts the flow of information for the reader.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'lion's share,' 'fluctuates,' and 'stark contrast' to describe the data. However, there are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'Marely' instead of 'merely,' 'serios' instead of 'serious,' and 'demonstrate' instead of 'demonstrates.' These errors occasionally impede the clarity of your writing. To reach a higher band, focus on accurate spelling and ensuring that your word choices are appropriate for a formal academic report rather than using overly idiomatic expressions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies on a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('The table demonstrate'), missing articles ('in shown in the table'), and inconsistent verb tenses when describing past data. Furthermore, the lack of capitalization at the beginning of sentences and inconsistent punctuation make the text difficult to follow. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of basic grammatical errors limits the score. Focus on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and basic sentence punctuation.
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