Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The table provides information about the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries caused by gun and knife crime statistics in Great Britain between 1998 to 2007. it also shows the percentage increase in each category over the period.
To initiate with, In 1998 to 1999 there was 49 fatal injuries, 162 serious injuries, 553 slight injuries given a total of 864 cases. In the following years its gradually increase and reached around 95 fatal injuries, 392 serous injuries, 1390 slight injuries in [redacted phone].
Furthermore, In [redacted phone] its slightly decline phase come in fatal injuries it's become 80% while 416 serious injuries, 1683 slight injuries and total became 2179. Moreover, according to the table the percentage increases were 18% for fatal injuries, 194% for serious injuries, 405% for slight injuries and 342% for the total number of injuries.
Overall, the number of injuries increased over the periods. slight injuries were the most common and showed the biggest increases. Fatal injuries were much lower in number. The total number of injuries is also significantly from 864 in[redacted phone] to 3821 in [redacted phone].
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
You have successfully identified the main features of the data, including the overall upward trend and the specific percentage increases. You included data points for the start, middle, and end of the period, which provides a good overview. However, the response lacks a clear, analytical comparison between the categories. For instance, while you mention that slight injuries were the most common, you could have contrasted this more effectively with the significantly lower number of fatal injuries. Additionally, there are some inaccuracies in the data reporting, such as the mention of '80%' for fatal injuries in 2002-2003, which does not align with the provided table. More precise data selection would improve the clarity of your report.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. You use some cohesive devices such as 'To initiate with', 'Furthermore', and 'Overall'. However, some of these transitions are slightly unnatural or misused (e.g., 'To initiate with' is not standard academic phrasing). The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the referencing is occasionally weak, making some sentences feel disjointed. Improving the variety and accuracy of your linking words will help the flow of your writing and make the relationships between the data points more explicit.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the main points, using terms like 'fatal', 'serious', 'slight', and 'percentage increase'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'its gradually increase' (should be 'it gradually increased') and 'its slightly decline phase come in'. These errors occasionally distract the reader. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise collocations and ensuring that your word forms (nouns vs. verbs) are used correctly in context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('its gradually increase'), tense inconsistencies ('its slightly decline phase come in'), and missing articles or prepositions. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the overall fluency of the response. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that verbs are correctly conjugated and that you are using the correct tense when describing past data.
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