Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The table illustrates the number of fatal, critical and minor injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and it also shows the increase of percentage for each degree of injury throughout the period.

Overall, total injuries kept increasing throughout the period. Minor injuries recorded the highest number of injuries throughout the period. However, fatal injuries gradually increased until 2003 and then fluctuated till end of the period. Similarly, slightly injuries accounted for the highest percentage. In contrast, fatal injures percentage recorded the lowest increased.

This table shows that fata injuries was 49 in 1999 and it kept increased till 2003. However, after 2003 it started fluctuated till the end of the period and the fatal injuries was 58 only in [redacted phone]. On the other hand, slightly injuries was 653 in year [redacted phone]. The number of serious injuries gradually increased till 2004 and it surge to 3296 in year [redacted phone]. On the other hand, serious injuries was 162 in year [redacted phone] and it gradually increased throughout the period.

The demonstrates that the percentage of fatal injuries only increased by 18% while slightly injuries percentage was 405%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the data, including the overall trends and specific figures. However, the analysis is somewhat inconsistent. For instance, you mention 'fatal injuries gradually increased until 2003' but then state 'fata injuries was 49 in 1999', which is slightly confusing. The comparison of the percentage increase is included, but the data reporting is occasionally inaccurate or lacks precision (e.g., 'slightly injuries was 653'). To improve, ensure that the data points selected are clearly linked to the years provided in the table and that the distinction between categories is maintained consistently throughout the report.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs focusing on specific data. Cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'However', 'Similarly', and 'On the other hand' are used to connect ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by repetitive sentence structures and some awkward transitions. For example, starting two consecutive sentences with 'On the other hand' in the third paragraph makes the writing feel mechanical. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task, but there are several instances of word-choice errors and incorrect collocations. For example, you use 'slightly injuries' instead of 'slight injuries' and 'fata injuries' (a spelling error). Phrases like 'it surge to' and 'recorded the lowest increased' are grammatically incorrect and demonstrate a lack of precision. To reach a higher band, focus on using accurate terminology for describing trends (e.g., 'surged to' instead of 'surge to') and ensure that adjectives and nouns are used correctly in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('fatal injuries was 49'), incorrect verb tenses ('it kept increased'), and missing articles or pluralization errors ('slightly injuries'). While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for tense consistency would significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.

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