Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The table illustrates the number of fatal, critical and minor injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and it also shows the increase of percentage for each degree of injury throughout the period.

Overall, total injuries kept increasing throughout the period. Minor injuries recorded the highest number of injuries throughout the period. However, fatal injuries gradually increased until 2003 and then fluctuated till the end of the period. Similarly, slight injuries accounted for the highest percentage. In contrast, the percentage of fatal injuries recorded the lowest increase.

This table shows that fatal injuries were 49 in 1999 and it kept increasing till 2003. However, after 2003 it started fluctuating till the end of the period and the fatal injuries were 58 only in [redacted phone]. On the other hand, slight injuries were 653 in [redacted phone]. The number of slight injuries gradually increased till 2004 and it surged to 3296 in [redacted phone]. On the other hand, serious injuries were 162 in [redacted phone] and it gradually increased throughout the period.

This demonstrates that the percentage of fatal injuries only increased by 18% while the slight injuries percentage was 405%. However, the serious injuries percentage was 194%. The percentage of injuries was 342 and slight injuries contributed more as compared to serious and fatal injuries.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main trends and providing relevant data. You successfully highlighted the overall increase in injuries and contrasted the percentage growth between fatal and slight injuries. However, the report could be improved by better grouping of data. For instance, the paragraphing is slightly disjointed, and some data points are presented in a repetitive list-like manner. To reach a higher band, ensure that comparisons are more integrated rather than just stating numbers sequentially. The overview is clear, but the analysis of the percentage increase could be more sophisticated by linking it directly to the raw data trends.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'However', 'Similarly', and 'In contrast' to signal shifts in the argument. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the use of 'On the other hand' is repetitive, appearing twice in the same paragraph. Paragraphing is present, but the transition between the description of raw numbers and the percentage analysis could be smoother. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus would enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuated', 'surged', and 'accounted for' appropriately. There are some minor inaccuracies, such as 'increase of percentage' instead of 'percentage increase'. While you successfully use topic-specific vocabulary, the range is somewhat limited, and you rely on basic descriptors for trends. To improve, try to incorporate more precise collocations and avoid repeating the same phrases. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the meaning clearly, but it lacks the sophistication required for a higher band score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. Most sentences are clear, and errors in grammar—such as 'it kept increasing' (referring to plural 'fatal injuries')—do not impede communication. There are some minor issues with subject-verb agreement and punctuation, such as the phrasing 'the fatal injuries were 58 only in 2006-2007'. To achieve a higher score, aim for more varied complex sentence structures and ensure consistent subject-verb agreement throughout the text. Overall, the control of grammar is solid, with errors being infrequent and non-systematic.

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