Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The given tabular chart gives information on fatal, serious or slight injuries: there are total three categories of injuries in 1998 to 1999, 49 people sufferred a fatal injury whereas 162 citizens underwent a serious injury whereas 653 indivuals experienced a slight injury the total number of people who sufferred from injuries is 864 . in the next year, 1999- 2000 the first category is fatal injuries 62of people faced a fatal injuries whereas 200 citizens sufferred from serious injuries whereas 933 indiviuals experienced a slight injury the total number of people who sufferred is 1195 other than this in 2000- 2001 72 persons experienced a fatal injury whereas 244 citizens suffered a serious injury whereas 1066 citizens faced a slight injury. whereas total 1382 citizens sufferred from injuries during 2000 - 2001. whereas during the next year i.e; 2001 -2002 95 citizens sufferred from fatal injuries whereas 392 indiviuals faced a serious injury meanwhile 1390 people sufferred a slight injury during the given year 1877 citizens sufferred from injuries in 2002 - 2003 the count fatal injuries has been decreased by 15%and comes out to be 80 the count of serious injuries is 416 so it has been increased by 24%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to provide a clear overview of the main trends, which is a critical requirement for Task 1. Instead, it presents a repetitive, year-by-year listing of data points. By focusing on individual years rather than grouping information or highlighting significant changes, the response lacks a clear summary of the main features. Furthermore, the response is incomplete, as it stops abruptly while describing the 2002-2003 data, failing to cover the entire period up to 2007 or the overall percentage increases mentioned in the prompt. The lack of synthesis and the failure to complete the task significantly limit the score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text lacks paragraphing, appearing as a single, dense block of information. The progression of ideas is mechanical and repetitive, relying heavily on the word 'whereas' to link clauses. There is no logical structure or clear transition between the years. The use of cohesive devices is extremely limited and often misused, such as the frequent, awkward repetition of 'whereas' and 'sufferred'. The lack of effective paragraphing and the absence of a clear organizational structure make the text difficult to follow.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student uses the same few verbs, such as 'sufferred' (which is also misspelled) and 'faced', throughout the text. There is no attempt to use a range of vocabulary to describe trends or data, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'declined', or 'significant'. Spelling errors are frequent, including 'sufferred' and 'indiviuals'. The lack of variety and the persistent spelling issues prevent the response from demonstrating the range required for higher bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, repetitive sentence structures. There is a lack of complex sentence forms, and punctuation is poor, with missing spaces after commas and periods, and incorrect use of semicolons. Errors are frequent and systematic, particularly in subject-verb agreement and sentence construction. For example, 'there are total three categories' and 'the count fatal injuries has been decreased' demonstrate a lack of control over basic grammatical rules. These errors frequently impede the flow of the text.
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