Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The table compares numerous injuries resulting from weapons in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007.

Overall, slight and serious injuries increased numerously in between 1998 to 2007, while fatal injuries remained fluctuated over the period of time.

Firstly, In [redacted phone], serious injuries were accounted for 162, followed by slight injuries with 653. Meanwhile by 2000- 2007, critical injuries were doubled with 476 injuries. Additionally, slight injuries were 653 in the year [redacted phone], but it rose up thrice in the year 2004, representing 1862 injuries, and ending with 3296 injured people in between [redacted phone] respectively. Moreover, fatal remained fluctuated over the time, 49 injuries in [redacted phone], followed by 80 injury in [redacted phone], and decreased at the end of 2007 with 58 injuries. Furthermore, there was rapid increase in the percentage of each degree of injury over the time.

To sum up, serious and slight injuries rises incredibly through the years, while fatal injuries remained fluctuated and constant.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the data, including the overall trends and specific figures for the three categories. However, the reporting of data is occasionally inaccurate or confusing. For instance, you mention 'critical injuries were doubled with 476' in 2000-2007, but the table shows 476 as the figure for 2000-2001. Furthermore, the summary of the percentage increase is vague, as you do not specify the actual percentages provided in the table. To improve, ensure that data points are cited precisely and that comparisons between the years are clearly linked to the provided figures rather than generalized statements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Meanwhile', 'Additionally', and 'To sum up'. However, the flow is sometimes hindered by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. For example, the transition 'Meanwhile by 2000- 2007' is slightly unnatural. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as when you refer to 'critical injuries' without having established that term earlier. The progression of ideas is generally logical, but the internal cohesion within sentences could be smoother to improve the overall readability.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuated', 'representing', and 'percentage increase'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and unnatural collocations. For example, 'increased numerously' is not standard English; 'rose significantly' or 'increased substantially' would be more appropriate. You also use 'critical injuries' as a synonym for 'serious injuries', which is slightly imprecise. There is also a repetitive use of 'injuries' and 'year'. Expanding your range of synonyms and focusing on more precise collocations will help you reach a higher band score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt to use complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'serious injuries were accounted for 162' (passive voice error), 'fatal remained fluctuated' (missing noun/subject), and 'slight injuries rises incredibly' (subject-verb agreement error). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are inconsistencies in spacing and capitalization. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that passive constructions are used correctly. Reducing these frequent errors will significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.

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