Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Its cleare frome the table shows the number in Great Britain -Gun and knifte Crime statistics between [redacted phone].In period of [redacted phone] Slight is the hiesght number than Fatal about 663 while Fatal has the lowest number about 49.

According to what is show in the table that Fatal is increased slowly between 1998 to 2007 however Slight is increased queckly in this period. Serious and Slight are same and are not have any number between [redacted phone] but in Fatal has 58 number in this year. Fatal has the lowest number about 18 in the last one while Slight has the hiesght one between there. The Total not give number in [redacted phone]. Mostly changed in Serious above 20 and it has nearly number in Slight between 2004 to 2006.

In conclousion, we could say that hiesght and lowest number in years and compare between Serious, Slight and Fatal .Also, there are changed in 1998 to 2007.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear or accurate summary of the data. The main features are not effectively highlighted, and the comparisons made are often confusing or factually incorrect based on the provided table. For example, the statement that 'Serious and Slight are same and are not have any number between 2006-2007' is inaccurate and unclear. The response lacks a coherent overview of the trends, and the data points selected do not provide a meaningful summary of the statistics. The information is presented in a fragmented way, making it difficult for the reader to grasp the overall trends in gun and knife crime.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is weak. The use of cohesive devices is limited and often mechanical or misused, such as 'In conclousion' which does not effectively summarize the preceding points. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow the relationship between the data points mentioned. The sentences are often disjointed, and the lack of clear transitions between ideas hinders the overall flow of the report. The structure does not adequately support the development of the topic.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, which restricts the ability to describe the data accurately. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'cleare', 'frome', 'knifte', 'hiesght', 'queckly', and 'conclousion'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information precisely; for instance, the writer uses 'number' repeatedly instead of more appropriate terms like 'figures', 'statistics', or 'incidents'. The lack of control over word choice and spelling significantly impacts the clarity of the report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are significant issues with sentence structure, such as 'Its cleare frome the table shows the number', which is ungrammatical. Subject-verb agreement is often incorrect, and there is a lack of control over basic tenses and prepositions. The use of complex structures is attempted but is consistently inaccurate, leading to confusion. Punctuation is also inconsistent throughout the text. The errors are pervasive and often make the meaning difficult to interpret.

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