Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The table demonstrates gun and knife crime statistics in Great Britain between 1998 to 2007,which include the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries. Overall the percentage has increased for each degree of injury in 2007.

The number of fatal injury was least between 1998 - 1999 and 2005 - 2006,which was 49.In contrast, the number of highly injured patient rose in year of 2001 -2003, which was 95. although the number decreased in year of 2002 to 2004, which was 80 and 68 respectively. Again, in the year of 2004 -2005 ,number has slightly increased to 77 and by the end of 2006 the number of fatal patients comes down to 49 and 58 in year 2007.

Highest number of serious injured patients founded in year of 2005 -2006. which was 476. While the lowest number was 162 patients in year of 1998 -1999. There was gradual increase in number of serious injury from 2000 to 2004,which was 437 .By the end of 2005 , serious injury has decreased to 411. However, these number shoot to 476, by the end of 2006.Moreover, highest number of slight injury founded in year of [redacted phone] then the number has gradually increased.

Overall, the percentage of fatal injury has increased to 18% in the year of 1998 to [redacted phone]% increment has shown in serious injury and 405%

shown in slight injury. Total 342% crime has increased in year of 1998 to 2006/7.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response provides an overview and selects key data points, but the analysis is inconsistent. You successfully identify the main trends and the overall percentage increases. However, the reporting of specific figures is often confusing or inaccurate. For example, you mention 'highly injured patient' instead of using the categories provided (fatal, serious, slight). Furthermore, the description of the data is sometimes contradictory, such as stating the lowest number of serious injuries was 162 in 1998-1999, but then failing to clearly contrast this with the peak. The summary of the percentage increases is a good attempt at synthesis, but the overall clarity of the data reporting needs improvement to reach a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'Again, in the year of' and 'Moreover, highest number of' feel forced and do not always link ideas logically. The referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly when discussing specific years and figures, making it difficult to follow the progression of the data. While there is an attempt to use transition words, the flow between sentences is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and punctuation errors, which hinders the overall coherence of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is limited and contains several inaccuracies. You rely on basic terms like 'number of' and 'injured patients' repeatedly. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'highly injured patient' instead of 'serious injuries' and 'shoot to' which is too informal for an academic report. The phrase 'number of fatal patients' is also imprecise, as it refers to the statistics of injuries rather than the patients themselves. To improve, you should focus on using more precise terminology related to data reporting and avoiding repetitive phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include missing articles ('in year of'), incorrect verb forms ('founded' instead of 'found'), and inconsistent tense usage. Punctuation is also problematic, with spaces missing after commas and periods, and inconsistent use of hyphens in date ranges. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage would be beneficial.

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