Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The table illustrates the number of died, serious and slight injuries by gun and knife crime in Great Britain between 1998 and 2007 moreover, the number of percentage increase for each degree of injury from 1998 to 2007.

Overall,the table shows that in 2001, the dead rate was highest and lowest in 1998. However, the both injury by this weapons was raise over the period.

In [redacted phone], the crime by gun and knife was at the lowest and it was slightly increasing over the time period.In 1998, the total crime rate was 864 including injuries and fatal however, the dead rate was decreased moreover,the injuries are increased over the period. In 2001 the dead rate was at its peak like 95 people died after this year the number of fatal was slightly decreased.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you have attempted to identify some trends, the analysis is incomplete and lacks a clear overview of the data. You have not adequately addressed the 'percentage increase' aspect of the prompt, which is a key feature of the table. Furthermore, the information provided is somewhat confusing and lacks the necessary detail to fully report the main features. To improve, ensure you cover all parts of the prompt, provide a clear summary of the data, and meet the minimum length requirement to allow for full development of your ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a clear logical progression. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the transitions between sentences are often mechanical or awkward, such as the use of 'moreover' and 'however' in ways that do not always connect ideas logically. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the trends you are describing. To improve, focus on using cohesive devices more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through the data.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You use basic terms like 'died' and 'dead rate' instead of more precise academic vocabulary such as 'fatalities' or 'mortality rate'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'the both injury by this weapons was raise'. To improve, try to incorporate a wider range of vocabulary related to statistics and trends, and pay closer attention to the correct form of words (e.g., using nouns instead of verbs where appropriate).

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'the dead rate was decreased moreover,the injuries are increased' and 'the both injury by this weapons was raise'. You rely heavily on simple sentence structures, and your attempts at more complex sentences often contain errors in subject-verb agreement and tense usage. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and proofreading for punctuation errors, particularly regarding spacing after commas and periods.

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