Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The table illustrates the nunber of fatal, serious and slight injuries outcoming from two different crime weapons such as gun and knife in Great Britain between 1998 and 2007, while the proportion demonstrates increasing degree of injury over the same period.
Overall, the number of fatal injuries fluctuated as per given period, while serious and slight categories dominated by rising patterns over the period. However, there were no data for serious, slight and total in [redacted phone]. The highest percentage of slight injuries increased between the particular period.
To begin with, 49 people had fatal injury in [redacted phone], compared with 162 suffered from seious stage, and 653 from slight injury. In addition, fatal injuries rose to 95 in [redacted phone]. At the same period, slight injury stood at 1390. Subsequently, serious and slight injuries increased considerably till [redacted phone], reaching at 476 and 3296, respectively.
Furthermore, there were missing information of serious, slight and total categories, expect fatal, which was recorded at 58. In terms of degree of injury, the largest proportion of increasement noticed in slight injury, accounting for 405%, while the least enhancement constituted for fatal, at 18%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the data, including the trends for fatal, serious, and slight injuries, and correctly identifies the percentage increases. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical. While you mention the missing data for 2006-2007, you could have integrated this more smoothly into the overview or body paragraphs. The comparison between the categories is present, but the reporting of figures is occasionally repetitive. To reach a higher band, ensure that the 'main features' are highlighted more clearly in the overview, rather than just listing data points in the body paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, with a clear introduction, overview, and supporting body paragraphs. Cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'In addition', and 'Furthermore' are used to guide the reader. However, some transitions feel slightly forced or mechanical. The referencing is generally clear, though the flow between the description of the trends and the final summary of percentages could be improved to create a more cohesive narrative. Overall, the progression of ideas is logical and easy to follow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuated', 'dominated', and 'considerably'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and non-standard collocations, such as 'outcoming from', 'increasement', and 'least enhancement'. These errors occasionally distract the reader. To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensure that word forms (e.g., 'increase' vs 'increasement') are used correctly. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the meaning, but lacks the precision required for a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'the number of fatal injuries fluctuated as per given period' (missing articles) and 'there were missing information' (subject-verb agreement). Some phrasing is also unnatural, such as 'reaching at 476'. While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Increasing the accuracy of basic grammar and refining the use of articles and prepositions will help improve your score.
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