Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The table illustrates the information regarding the comparison of fatal, serious and slight injuries percentages resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007.
Overall, it is evident that, the numbers of slight and serious injuries increased while fatal injuries decreased over the given period.
In terms of slight injuries which were dramatically climbing from 653 to 3296 over the period of [redacted phone]. This was the major contribution to surging of total injuries.
In terms of serious injuries that were gradually soaring from 162 to 476 during [redacted phone].
In contrast, fatal injuries were rise from 49 to 80 in 1998 to 2003 then started falling and ultimately reached 58 in 2007.
The percentage increase of total injuries was rising from 18 of fatal to 194 serious and 405 slight injuries with sum of all three about 342.
In short, slight injuries are the most as compared to fatal injuries which are the least along with dramtic rise in total injuries over the period of 9 years.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response provides a clear overview of the main trends, identifying the increase in slight and serious injuries and the decrease in fatal ones. However, the reporting of data is inconsistent and at times inaccurate. For instance, the statement that fatal injuries were 'rising from 49 to 80 in 1998 to 2003' is not fully supported by the data provided in the prompt, and the final paragraph attempts to summarize the percentage increases but does so in a confusing manner that lacks clarity. While the main features are selected, the analysis of the data needs to be more precise to reach a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, the use of 'In terms of' at the start of consecutive paragraphs is repetitive. Furthermore, some sentences are grammatically incomplete or lack logical flow, such as 'In terms of slight injuries which were dramatically climbing', which functions as a fragment rather than a full sentence. Better use of linking words and improved sentence structure would enhance the logical progression of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task, but there is a lack of precision and some awkward word choices. Phrases like 'surging of total injuries' and 'dramtic rise' (spelling error) show an attempt to use varied vocabulary, but the collocations are not always natural. The student relies on basic descriptors like 'climbing' and 'soaring' repeatedly. To improve, the student should focus on using more academic collocations and ensuring that words are used in the correct grammatical context to convey information accurately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include incorrect verb forms ('fatal injuries were rise'), missing articles, and sentence fragments ('In terms of serious injuries that were gradually soaring...'). Punctuation is also inconsistent. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and ensuring every sentence has a clear main verb would be highly beneficial.
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