Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The table shows the number pf fatal serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

In this table shows that there was a crime incident from 1998 to 2007 which is many peoples affected by guns and knife the table show those all affected persons number how its increased over the year written in the table.In the table we can see that 1998 to 1999 affected by fatal was 49 persons some people was in the serious condition which was 162 slightly damaged 653 and the total number of affected person was 864.

From 1999 to 2000 affected numbers increased in that time it was little bit increased the fatal affected person was 62 who was in the serious condition they was 200 person slightly damaged person was 933 i the year total affected person was 1194.

In the 2001 fatal affected person was 72 in serious condition person numbers was 244 slightly damaged was 1066 total was 1382

In the 2002 fatal affected person was 95 in serious condition person numbers was 392 slightly damaged was 1390 total was 1877

In the 2003 fatal affected person was 80 in serious condition person numbers was 416 slightly damaged was 1683 total was 2179

In the 2004 fatal affected person was 68 in serious condition person numbers was 437 slightly damaged was 1862 total was 2367

In the 2005 fatal affected person was 77 in serious condition person numbers was 411 slightly damaged was 3424 total was 3912

In the 2006 fatal affected person was 49 in serious condition person numbers was 476 slightly damaged was 3296 total was 3821

In the 2007 fatal affected person was 58 in serious condition person numbers was 194 slightly damaged was 405 total was 342

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to provide a clear overview or identify the main trends, which is a requirement for Task 1. Instead, the student lists data year-by-year in a repetitive, mechanical fashion. While the data is presented, there is no attempt to compare the categories or highlight significant changes, such as the overall percentage increase mentioned in the prompt. The response lacks analytical depth and fails to select the 'main features' as requested, resulting in a list-like summary rather than a report.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response is organized into short, repetitive paragraphs, but there is no logical progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are almost entirely absent; the text relies on a repetitive structure ('In the [year] fatal affected person was...') rather than using linking words or referencing to connect ideas. Paragraphing is used, but it does not serve to group information logically, as each year is treated as a separate, isolated point. The lack of transition between sentences makes the text feel disjointed.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student uses the same phrases ('affected person', 'serious condition', 'slightly damaged') throughout the entire response. There is no attempt to use a range of vocabulary to describe trends (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable'). Spelling errors are frequent, such as 'pf' instead of 'of' and 'great Britain' (which should be capitalized). The range is insufficient to convey the information with any degree of precision or variety.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammar is characterized by frequent errors that often impede clarity. There is a lack of complex sentence structures; most sentences are simple and grammatically incorrect (e.g., 'In this table shows that there was a crime incident...'). Subject-verb agreement is consistently poor ('they was 200 person'), and there is a lack of proper punctuation, particularly with capitalization and sentence boundaries. The reliance on basic, flawed sentence patterns significantly limits the ability to communicate the data effectively.

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