Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The table compares the data of all injuries because of different crimes like gun, knife in Great Britain in between 1998 to 2007 and as the time passes their percentage took growth for each degree.
If we analyze the statistics of give data we clearly see that there is the massive increase in percentage for the year 98, 99 -2005, 06 and from 06-07. There are many fatal , serious, slight injuries in the years but for serious and fatal injuries there were no injury in the yaer [redacted phone].If we go deep into the data we can say that number of slight injuries are much more for around 405% than fatal ones for around 18%. In [redacted phone] there are the highest number of slight injuries while in [redacted phone] the rate was low and for the fatal ones it was also at low in the year [redacted phone] but on hight in the years [redacted phone] . Other rates fluctuated between the years [redacted phone] sometimes high sometimes low in these ranges . If we talk about serious injuries they were high in [redacted phone] while there were no injuries in [redacted phone] .
In conclusion, From the given data we can clearly specifies that alot of injuries were slight injuries with max number and serious injuries were at medium and for fatal injuries they are low in percentage.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to clearly identify the main trends or provide a coherent overview. The description of the data is often confusing, particularly the claim that there were 'no injuries' in 2006-2007, which misinterprets the table. The comparison between categories is vague, and the mention of specific percentages (e.g., 405% and 18%) is not clearly linked to the provided data points. To improve, you must focus on selecting the most significant features—such as the overall growth in slight injuries—and present them with greater accuracy and clarity.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and often repetitive (e.g., 'If we analyze', 'If we go deep', 'If we talk about'). The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between different years and injury types. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, logical focus that contributes to the overall summary.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive, relying on simple terms like 'high', 'low', and 'number'. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice, such as 'took growth' instead of 'increased' or 'on hight' instead of 'at a peak'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. You should aim to use more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'significant increase'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('number of slight injuries are'), article usage ('the year 98'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or lack proper punctuation, which hinders readability. While there is an attempt at complex sentence structures, they are often inaccurate. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like pluralization and verb tense consistency.
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