Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The table illustrate various injuries done by two different weapons during crime at Great Britain between 1998 and 2007. Overall, the period of the starting period of data with first two years of duration have lowest injuries in serious and slight and also the lowest crime rate seen of that phase. However, those data increased with the time period additionally those number became four time increased.
in year [redacted phone], fetal injuries showed most huge amount as compare to other years by following 95 dead. in starting year period 1998 to 1999 the fetal, serious, and slight showed figures followd by 49, 162, 653. which increased in year [redacted phone] the fetal injuries remained same where other injuries rapidly followed by number 476, 3296. which indicated the crime injuries increased a lot during time period. among them slight injuries rapidly growing as compare to other two and fetal injuries remaind same as start.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the data, but it fails to clearly identify the main trends or provide a comprehensive overview. While it mentions the increase in injuries, the description of the data is fragmented and lacks precision. For example, the statement that numbers became 'four time increased' is vague and does not accurately reflect the specific data points provided in the table. Furthermore, the comparison between years is confusing, and the reporting of figures is inconsistent. To improve, you should focus on selecting the most significant data points and grouping them logically to highlight clear trends rather than listing isolated figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical flow is weak. The transition between the introduction and the body is abrupt, and the internal structure of the second paragraph is difficult to follow. The use of cohesive devices is limited and often inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'in starting year period' and 'which indicated'. The referencing is also unclear, making it difficult for the reader to track the progression of the data. Better use of linking words like 'consequently', 'furthermore', or 'in contrast' would help improve the logical flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. There are several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'fetal injuries' (which should be 'fatal') and 'most huge amount'. The phrase 'done by two different weapons' is also unnatural in this context. You rely on basic descriptors like 'increased' and 'remained same' throughout the text. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'significant rise', 'remained stable', or 'fluctuated', and ensure that your terminology is accurate for the subject matter.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the response that occasionally impede communication. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('The table illustrate'), incorrect preposition usage ('at Great Britain'), and awkward sentence structures. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper punctuation, such as the run-on sentences in the second paragraph. The range of grammatical structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct verb tenses and subject-verb agreement, before attempting more complex structures.
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