Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The table illustrates the numerical data of fatal, serious and slight injuries occur due to knife and gun crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage of each injury increases over the period.

Overall, the data describes that there is a total increase of 342% in crime between 1998 and 2007; fragmentally, slight (194%) and serious injury (405%) increased in relatively higher percentage compared to fatal crimes (18%). The crime data between 2006 and 2007 have not been given.

The highest total number of crimes observed in the year between 2004 and 2005, however the lowest total number of crimes held in [redacted phone]. Fatal crimes were in highest number in [redacted phone], the lowest was in [redacted phone] and [redacted phone] and the fatal crime rate trend is irregular in [redacted phone]. The serious crime trend shows a steady increase from 162 to 476, the slight crime trend shows a regular increasing pattern between 1998 to 2005 and decreased in the last year to 3821. Summarily, there is steady increasing trend of overall crime between these years.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main features of the data, including the overall trends and specific comparisons between injury types. You correctly highlighted that slight and serious injuries saw a much higher percentage increase than fatal ones. However, the response could be improved by better integrating the specific data points. For instance, you mention the total number of crimes peaked in 2004-2005, but you do not provide the actual figures to support this. Additionally, the statement regarding the 2006-2007 data is slightly confusing; it would be clearer to state that the data provided covers the period up to 2006-2007, rather than suggesting it is missing.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, an overview, and supporting details. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Overall', 'however', and 'Summarily', to link your ideas. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes a bit mechanical. For example, the transition between the overview and the specific data could be smoother. Additionally, the final paragraph contains a mix of different trends that could be better grouped to improve the overall progression of the argument. Paragraphing is present, but the structure within the body paragraph is slightly cluttered.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'numerical data', 'fragmentally', and 'irregular'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. For example, 'numerical data of fatal... injuries occur' should be 'numerical data of fatal... injuries occurring'. The word 'fragmentally' is not the most natural choice in this context; 'in terms of specific categories' would be more precise. There are also minor issues with phrasing, such as 'the lowest total number of crimes held in', which should be 'the lowest total number of crimes was recorded in'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. However, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text. For instance, 'injuries occur due to' should be 'injuries occurring due to', and 'the fatal crime rate trend is irregular' lacks a clear subject-verb agreement or tense consistency. Punctuation is generally functional, but there are some run-on sentences, such as 'Fatal crimes were in highest number in 2001-2002, the lowest was in 1998-1999 and 2006-2007 and the fatal crime rate trend is irregular'. These errors do not impede communication but prevent the response from reaching a higher band.

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