Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The table compares between three degrees of injuries resulting from gun and knife crimes in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007. The overall injured amount has gradually increased thoughout the period with slight injuries showing the highest percentage increase followed by serious injuries. Fatal injuries witnesses the smallest increase.
All three degree of injuries have experienced a noticeable rise in injured amounts with Slight injuries leading the pack. From [redacted phone] only 663 were injured and this number rose to a staggering 3296 in the period [redacted phone], resulting in a staggering increase of 405%. Serious injury follows behind with an increase from 162 to 476, resulting in an increase of around 194%. Fatal injuries comes last and it experienced the least increase throught the years, It went from 49 to 58, a reportedly 18% increase.
Overall the total injuries percentage has grown substantially during this period from an amount of a measly 864 to an astonishing 3821 which results in a percentage increase of 342%. The data for [redacted phone], however, is incomplete as only the fatal category data is represented. So no total calculations can be derived considering this period.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
You have successfully identified the main features and trends, including the overall growth and the specific percentage increases for each category. You correctly highlighted that slight injuries saw the most significant rise. However, there is a factual error in your interpretation of the data: you claim the 2006-2007 data is incomplete, but the table clearly provides figures for all categories in that period. This misreading of the prompt affects the accuracy of your summary. To improve, ensure you carefully cross-reference the table columns and rows before writing to avoid misinterpreting the provided statistics.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a concluding summary. You use cohesive devices such as 'followed by', 'from... to...', and 'however' to link ideas. However, the transition between paragraphs could be smoother, and some phrasing is slightly repetitive (e.g., 'resulting in a...'). The paragraphing is appropriate, and the progression of ideas is generally easy to follow, though the final paragraph's confusion regarding the data completeness slightly disrupts the logical flow of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'staggering', 'noticeable rise', and 'substantially'. However, there are some issues with word choice and collocation. For example, 'injured amount' is unnatural; 'number of injuries' would be more precise. You also use 'witnesses' incorrectly (should be 'witnessed') and 'reportedly' is used awkwardly in the context of a statistical table. Expanding your range of reporting verbs and avoiding repetitive intensifiers like 'staggering' would help elevate your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('Fatal injuries comes last', 'Fatal injuries witnesses') and punctuation errors (a comma splice in '...throughout the years, It went...'). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they occur frequently enough to limit the score. To improve, focus on proofreading for basic agreement and ensuring that your sentence boundaries are clearly marked with correct punctuation.
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