Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-08-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The table discribes the number of serious injuries from gun and knife crime in great britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage of every injurie grow for each degree of injury over the period.
1998 in great britain there is a lot of people facing crime problems gun and knife crime is occuring in everyday.
people are helpless by the increase of the crime in the britain according to the crime statistics the total number of injuries in 1998 to 1999 is 864.
From 1999 to 2005 the crime rate in britain is at its peak. public is dealing with serious issues at that time the serious injuries are 476 and the slight injuries are 3296 the increase in crime rate is 98.99% which is the hightest rate of crime in that time that british are dealing with but in 2007 the ratio of crime drop and the fatal crime rate is 58% and the serious crimes were controled .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to adequately address the task. While it mentions the topic, it does not accurately report the main features of the data provided in the table. The summary is fragmented, and the interpretation of the figures is confusing and inaccurate. For instance, the claim that 'the crime rate in Britain is at its peak' between 1999 and 2005 is not clearly supported by the data, and the percentages cited are misapplied. The response lacks a clear overview and fails to make meaningful comparisons between the categories of injury or the trends over time, which is essential for a Band 1 Academic task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. The paragraphs are disjointed, and there is no clear progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are largely absent or used incorrectly, making the text difficult to follow. For example, the transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is abrupt, and the use of 'but' to connect the final observations is ineffective. The lack of clear paragraphing and the absence of logical signposting mean that the information is not arranged coherently, which significantly hinders the reader's ability to understand the data trends.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic or inaccurate terminology. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'discribes' instead of 'describes', 'injurie' instead of 'injury', and 'hightest' instead of 'highest'. The student struggles to use precise language to describe statistical trends, opting for informal phrases like 'a lot of people' and 'crime problems' rather than academic vocabulary suitable for a data analysis task. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with any degree of precision or sophistication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are significant issues with sentence structure, including run-on sentences and fragments, such as '1998 in great britain there is a lot of people facing crime problems gun and knife crime is occuring in everyday.' Subject-verb agreement is inconsistent, and punctuation is largely ignored. The student relies almost exclusively on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex constructions are marred by errors in tense and word order. These persistent errors make the text difficult to read and understand.
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