Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The table compares the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Britian from 1998 to 2007.
Overall,in 2004 to 2005 the percentage of crime are highest in the table with total of 3912 and in 2006 the total value of crime is around 3821 was the second in statistics.
After analyzing the report,it can be seen that the value of crime in 1998 to 1999 the fatal was 49 and the serious is 162 and slight 653 with the total of 864.However,converting to the next year in 2000,the value of each crime statistics increase significantly with total number of 1195 respectively.Furthermore,in 2000 to 2002 the each injury section increase up to around the total number of 1877.
In contrast,in 2003 to 2006 the Britian crime statistics increase up to 50% with the value of injury fatal are 77 and serious was 411 and the total are 3912.The gun and knife crime increase every year in britian.In 2007,there is a decrease in the table of the crime only just fatal are 58 others are none.
In conclusion,the great britian improve in 2007 in the crime over the decade of between 1998 to 2006 but in 2007 the value of total only 342 respectively.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to clearly identify the main trends or make meaningful comparisons. The description of the data is often inaccurate or confusing, such as the claim that 2004-2005 had the highest crime rate with 3912, which does not align clearly with the provided table. The overview is weak and lacks a clear summary of the overall trend. Furthermore, the interpretation of the 2007 data is problematic, as the student suggests a decrease based on incomplete information. The response lacks a clear focus on the key features of the data, leading to an under-developed summary.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by awkward phrasing and unclear references. While some cohesive devices like 'Overall', 'Furthermore', and 'In contrast' are used, they are often applied mechanically or inappropriately. The transition between sentences is sometimes abrupt, making it difficult for the reader to follow the development of the argument. Paragraphing is present but does not effectively group related information, leading to a disjointed structure that hinders the overall flow of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic terms like 'value', 'number', and 'increase' throughout the text. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'the value of crime' instead of 'the incidence of crime' or 'crime rates'. Spelling errors, such as 'Britian' (repeatedly) and 'great britian', further detract from the quality of the writing. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey basic meaning but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex sentence structures, but these are frequently marred by grammatical errors. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the percentage of crime are highest'), missing articles, and incorrect tense usage. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several instances of missing spaces after commas and periods. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of errors is high enough to cause some difficulty for the reader and prevents the text from achieving a higher score.
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