Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The table illustrates the total number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain between 1998 to 2007 and over the year the percentage rise for each degree of injury.

Overall, it can be seen that the injury over the period has increase between 2004 to 2005 with total number of people 3912. However, the degree of suffering from 2006 to 2007 have only fatal with 58 number of fatal injuries, while among all calculating injuries resulting from gun and knife the lowest total number injury took place between 1998 to 1999.

On contract, the percentage level up for each degree of injuries over the period highest number of Slight about 405 percentage and Fatal have lowest with 18 percentage of injuries. Similarly, the total number of percentages for each degree of injury over the time is 342.

At lasts there is increasing and decreasing in the past year who have cause from injuries and there is different percentage of between the total and Slight.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear or accurate summary of the data. While the introduction identifies the topic, the body paragraphs struggle to report the main features effectively. The data interpretation is often confusing or incorrect, such as the claim that 'the degree of suffering from 2006 to 2007 have only fatal'. The response lacks a clear overview of the trends and fails to make meaningful comparisons between the categories of injury. The information provided is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to grasp the key statistics presented in the table.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is weak. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'On contract' (likely meant 'In contrast') and 'Similarly', but they are often used incorrectly or do not link ideas logically. The referencing is frequently unclear, and the sentences within paragraphs do not flow well, leading to a fragmented reading experience. The lack of clear structure and the misuse of transition words significantly hinder the coherence of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'level up' for 'increase', 'calculating injuries' instead of 'calculated injuries', and 'At lasts' instead of 'Lastly'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends or statistical data with precision. The misuse of basic terms makes the intended meaning unclear in several places, which restricts the ability to communicate the data effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'the injury... have increase' and 'the degree... have only fatal'. Sentence structures are often awkward or incomplete, and there is a lack of control over complex sentence forms. Punctuation is also inconsistent. While the meaning can sometimes be inferred, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar significantly affects the clarity of the writing.

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