Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The table provides data on how the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries happening from gun and knife crime in Great Britain since 1998 to 2007 and also the percentage rose for each degree of injury over the past years.
Overall, the table shows that fatal, serious and slight injuries percentage how people committed crime over the past years and it also increased by the years of injury. Fatal was the most common injury in serious and slight accidents where it took years from 1998 to 2007 it kept on increasing within the period of time
On the other hand, fatal injury in 1998 to 1999 was less upto 49 whereas serious and slight was increased within the time. From time to time it did rose to about 933 in slight and total was 1195 moreover 2002 to 2003 the crime ratio gradually increased from fatal to slight upto total 2367 the 2004 to 2005 it also kept on going up to total 3912 no difference was made into these years and kept on increasing from 2005 to 2006 the total was 3821 and final year 2006 to 2007 ghe fatal was only 18 and others didnt happened and the increased percentage more likely to be in 2005 to 2006.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear or accurate summary of the data. The main features are not effectively highlighted, and the description of the trends is often confusing or factually inconsistent with the provided table. For example, the claim that 'fatal was the most common injury' is incorrect, as the data shows slight injuries were significantly higher. Furthermore, the reporting of figures is disjointed and lacks a logical structure, making it difficult for the reader to grasp the overall trends in gun and knife crime. The response lacks a clear overview, which is essential for Task 1.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a logical progression of ideas. While there are paragraph breaks, the internal structure of the paragraphs is weak. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical and often incorrect way, such as 'On the other hand' and 'moreover', which do not logically connect the preceding and following sentences. The referencing is often unclear, and the flow of information is disjointed, which hinders the reader's ability to follow the argument or the data presentation. The lack of clear signposting makes the response difficult to navigate.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The range of vocabulary is very limited and often inappropriate for an academic report. There is significant repetition of basic words like 'increased', 'total', and 'injury'. The student struggles with word choice and collocation, such as 'happening from gun and knife crime' instead of 'resulting from' or 'caused by'. There are also instances where the vocabulary used does not accurately reflect the data, such as 'no difference was made into these years', which is vague and imprecise. The vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information clearly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with verb tenses ('did rose', 'didnt happened'), sentence structure, and preposition usage. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, making them difficult to parse. For example, 'fatal injury in 1998 to 1999 was less upto 49 whereas serious and slight was increased within the time' is grammatically incorrect and confusing. The control of complex structures is very limited, and errors are present in almost every sentence, which significantly affects the clarity of the writing.
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