Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given table illustrates the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Overall, it is clear that serious and slight injuries had been increasing aggressively over the time period but, the number of fatal injuries had been very low compared to other two types.

The number of Fatal injuries from gun and knife crime in Great Britain had faced fluctuation in this 9 years. Where form [redacted phone] there were 49 people faced It which rose till [redacted phone], and dropped form that point. While in [redacted phone] there were 58 injuries and there is 18% increase for each degree of fatal injury over the period.

However, serious injuries had been only increased continuously over the period in1998-99 there were 162 cases which rose to 476 cases till 2005-06 and there were 194% increase for each degree. Similarly with the slight injuries in 1998-99 were 653 that goes to 3296 cases in 2005-06 and 405% increase for each degree of injury over the period make it most committed crime. In total the cases had been strike form 864 to 3821 which 342% rose in every degree.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the table, including the trends for fatal, serious, and slight injuries. You successfully identified the overall upward trend and highlighted the significant percentage increases. However, the analysis is slightly hampered by inaccurate reporting of the data. For instance, you state that fatal injuries rose until 2001-2002 and then dropped, but the data shows a more complex fluctuation. Additionally, the phrase 'make it most committed crime' is a misinterpretation of the data, as the table shows injury statistics, not crime rates. To improve, ensure you double-check the figures and interpret the data labels more precisely to avoid factual errors.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs focusing on specific injury types. You use some cohesive devices such as 'However' and 'Similarly' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally disrupted by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions, such as 'In total the cases had been strike form 864 to 3821'. The use of referencing is sometimes unclear, and the progression of ideas could be smoother. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one without grammatical interference.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuation', 'continuously', and 'percentage increase'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and collocation errors, such as 'increasing aggressively' (a more natural choice would be 'sharply' or 'significantly') and 'cases had been strike' (which is grammatically incorrect). The misuse of 'committed crime' to describe injury statistics also indicates a need for more precise terminology. Expanding your vocabulary to include more academic collocations and ensuring words are used in the correct context will help improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt to use complex forms, there are frequent errors in verb tense and preposition usage, such as 'had been only increased' and 'form 1998-1999'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing and capitalization. These errors occasionally cause the reader to pause, though they do not completely impede communication. To improve, focus on mastering basic tense consistency and proofreading for common errors like subject-verb agreement and incorrect prepositions.

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