Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007
Student answer (Band 5.0)
This infographic illustrates the the ratio of fatal , serious and slight injuries showing from gun and knife crime in in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the ratio increase for each degree of injury over the time . Overall view of the infographic , is
Great Britain Gun and Knife crime statistics is highest in totals while least in fatal .
In 1998 to 1999 there were 49 Fatal injuries , 162 serious injuries , 653 Slight injuries and giving 864 total cases . These cases are generally increased at 2002 while decreased in 2003 . In 2003 Fatal injuries were 80 , 416 serious injuries , 1683 Slight injuries further the ratio of total cases was 2179 .
The most growing cases was Slight injuries which are climbed to 3424 in 2004 to 2005 moreover highest ratio of serious injuries was 476 in 2005 to 2006 furthermore the total highest cases were 3912 in 2005 to 2006 . In 2006 to 2007 there were 58 Fatal injuries while Serious and Slight injuries were become 0 .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarise the data, but it fails to accurately report the main features. The overview is confusing and lacks clarity, and the data selection is problematic. For instance, the statement that 'Serious and Slight injuries were become 0' in 2006-2007 is factually incorrect based on the provided table, suggesting a misunderstanding of the data. Furthermore, the response fails to make meaningful comparisons between the categories or over the period, relying instead on a list-like presentation of figures. The lack of accurate analysis and the misinterpretation of the final year's data significantly hinder the task achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inappropriate, such as the repetitive use of 'furthermore' and 'moreover' which do not always link ideas logically. The introductory sentence is disjointed, and the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is abrupt. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the overall structure feels like a series of disconnected points rather than a cohesive summary of trends. Improved paragraphing and a more natural use of linking words are required to improve the flow of information.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic terms like 'cases', 'highest', and 'ratio' throughout the text. There are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'most growing cases' instead of 'fastest-growing' or 'greatest increase', and 'were become 0' which is grammatically incorrect. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the data with precision, and the frequent misuse of terms like 'ratio' (when referring to raw numbers) limits the ability to describe the trends effectively. A wider range of descriptive verbs and nouns is needed.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'These cases are generally increased'), tense usage, and sentence structure (e.g., 'Overall view of the infographic , is Great Britain Gun and Knife crime statistics is...'). The writing relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors, such as 'The most growing cases was Slight injuries which are climbed to 3424'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas and periods. Greater attention to basic sentence construction and proofreading is essential.
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