Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This diagram illustrates the numbers of injuries in Great Britain with the knife and gun crimes from 1998 to 2007.

Overall, In 1998 to 1999 there were 62 individuals killed and 162 were in serious condition moreover, 653 people were slightly injured, and the total amount was 864. After that, every two years later this account was increased by time,

In 2002 this reported crossed two thousand crimes. There were a huge difference looked in 2004 to 2006 in these two years the attacks hit on the peak level, and 3913 citizens attacked by criminals. This amount was huge compared to previous years and coming years till 2007.

Between 2006 to 2007 there were 58 persons killed but, the injuries and the final database Was not clear.

In conclusion, in the early years according to this statement the conflicts were not much as compare to next years. In 2004 the attacks rapidly increased and parsue.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to provide a clear overview of the main trends. While it mentions some figures, the selection of data is inconsistent and lacks analytical depth. The report fails to compare the categories (fatal, serious, slight) effectively, and the description of the data is often inaccurate or confusing, such as the claim that the database was 'not clear' in 2007. To improve, you should group data logically (e.g., by injury type or time period) and ensure that the most significant trends—such as the overall increase—are clearly highlighted rather than just listing isolated numbers.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as 'After that, every two years later this account was increased by time,' which is grammatically awkward and confusing. The transition between ideas is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the development of the trends. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks coherence, as the sentences do not flow logically from one to the next.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'huge difference' and 'huge compared to' are imprecise and lack the academic tone required for Task 1. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'this account was increased' and 'the attacks hit on the peak level.' To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'fluctuated,' 'peaked,' 'remained stable,' or 'significant increase,' and avoid informal phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('this reported crossed'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward sentence structures ('there were a huge difference looked'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage and capitalization. While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, they are often faulty. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement and tense consistency would significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.

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