Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.5)

This table displays information regarding the number of deadly, serious and mild wounds resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain between 1998 and 2007 and the approximate increase for each extent of injury over the years.

Overall, the number of slight harms remains the highest in all years. This is followed by serious wounds in the same period. The number of fatal damages remains the lowest in all years as compared to ther others and also has the least percentage increase.

Furthermore, their remains the maximum number of moderate injuries in all years beginning with 653 in the period [redacted phone] which increased continuously and peaked at a number 3296 in [redacted phone] but soon declined to 3296 in [redacted phone]. It had a percentage increase of 405 percent. This is followed by serious injuries which show an increasing trend with initial number recorded at 162 in the period [redacted phone] and increased continuously finally recorded a number of 194 wounds in the period [redacted phone].It gained an approximate increase of 194 percent only less than the percentage increase of slight injuries.

Incontrast, the number of fatal injuries remain the lowest but shows a fluctuating trend throughtout the years which shows steady increase. Starting with a number of 49 wounds in the years [redacted phone] and peaked at 80 in the period [redacted phone] but again increased to 49 in [redacted phone] before increasing to 58 in the last period.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the data, including the trends for fatal, serious, and slight injuries. However, there are significant inaccuracies in the data reporting. For example, you state that slight injuries peaked at 3296 in 2005-2006 and then declined to 3296 in 2006-2007, which is contradictory. Furthermore, the percentage increase for slight injuries is stated as 405%, but the data provided in the prompt (if analyzed correctly) would show different figures. The analysis of the fatal injuries trend is also confusing, as you describe a 'steady increase' while simultaneously noting a 'fluctuating trend'. To improve, ensure that the data points cited are accurate and that your descriptions of trends align with the actual numbers provided in the table.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs focusing on specific categories. Cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'In contrast', and 'Overall' are used to link ideas. However, the progression of ideas is sometimes hindered by the inaccurate data reporting mentioned in the task achievement section. Additionally, some referencing is unclear, such as the phrase 'compared to the others' which lacks specific clarity. The paragraphing is appropriate, but the internal flow within the paragraphs could be improved by ensuring that the transition between data points is smoother and more logical.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task, but there is a tendency to use imprecise or repetitive terminology. For instance, 'deadly, serious and mild wounds' and 'fatal damages' are used where 'fatal, serious, and slight injuries' would be more appropriate in a statistical context. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'slight harms' and 'fatal damages'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the general meaning, it lacks the precision and sophistication required for a higher band score. Expanding your repertoire of reporting verbs and statistical terminology would be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text. Examples include 'their remains' (should be 'there remains'), 'peaked at a number 3296' (missing preposition), and 'throughtout' (spelling error). Additionally, there are issues with subject-verb agreement and punctuation, such as the missing space after the period in '2006-2007.It gained'. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the overall clarity and professional tone of the writing. Focusing on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy would significantly improve your score.

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