Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

so, In 1998 and 1999 the total number of crime is 864 , 49 are Fatal and serious are 162 and the slight are 653.

In 1999 and 2000 the full crime statistics are 1195, Fatal are 62 while serious are 200 and slight are 933.

In 2000 and 2001 the total crime are 1382 the fatal are 72 and the serious are 244 while the slight are 1066.

In 2001 and 2002 the total are 1877 95 are fatal and 392 are serious while slight are 1390.

Moving to 2002 and 2003 the total crime are 2179 the fatal are 80 and the serious are 416 where as the slight are 1683.

Next in 2003 and 2004 the total crime are 2367 in this the number of fatal are 68 and serious are 437 while slight 1862.

In 2004 and 2005 the total crime are 3912 the fatal are 77 and serious are 411 while slight are 3424.

moving to next in 2005 and 2006 the total crime are 3821 in this the fatal are 49 and the serious one are 476 while the slight are 3296.

In the last year 2006 and 2007 there are only fatal and the number of fatal are 58. Increase in the percent of fatal is 18 and the serious are 194 while the slight are 405. The total are 342 in between 2005,2006 and 2007.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to provide a summary of the main features or trends. Instead, it lists data for every single year in a repetitive, mechanical fashion. This approach is essentially a transcription of the table rather than an analytical report. There is no attempt to group data, identify significant peaks or troughs, or make meaningful comparisons between the categories of injury. The final paragraph is particularly confusing, as it attempts to summarize the percentage increases but does so in a way that is disconnected from the preceding data. To improve, you must identify the 'big picture' trends—such as the overall rise in crime until 2005—rather than listing every individual figure.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks a logical structure. It consists of a series of simple, repetitive sentences that follow the same pattern for every year. There is no paragraphing to separate the introduction, overview, or body paragraphs. Cohesive devices are either absent or used in a very basic, mechanical way (e.g., 'In 1998 and 1999...', 'In 1999 and 2000...'). The lack of transitions between the years makes the text feel like a list rather than a coherent report. To improve, you should group related data into paragraphs and use a wider variety of linking words to show relationships between the statistics.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on the same words throughout the text, such as 'total', 'fatal', 'serious', and 'slight'. There is no attempt to use synonyms or more sophisticated vocabulary to describe the trends (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', 'significant increase'). The phrasing is often awkward, such as 'the total number of crime is 864' and 'the serious one are 476'. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary, including verbs and nouns that describe statistical changes, and improve your control over word choice and collocation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting almost entirely of simple sentences with a repetitive 'subject + verb + object' structure. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the total number of crime is', 'the fatal are 62', 'the serious one are 476'). Punctuation is also problematic, with inconsistent use of commas and capitalization (e.g., 'so, In 1998...'). There is no evidence of complex sentence structures, such as relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions, which are necessary for higher band scores. Focus on mastering basic sentence construction before attempting more complex forms.

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