Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The provided table illustrates the information about the mortality rates, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Overall, 2001 and 2002 marked the highest fatal rates, whereas serious injuries hit the highest in [redacted phone]. [redacted phone] faced the highest figures of slightly injured people and the total number in all the above categories significantly rose in the same year. However, percentage share of the slight injured hit the highest point among all the other categories.

Moving into the details, total 864 were overall impacted by gun and knife crime rates, with fatal figures accounted for 49, followed by 162 and 653 for serious and slight injured by [redacted phone]. There was a dramatic rise in fatal rates accounted for 62. A similar pattern can be seen for serious and slight injured which accounted for 200 and 933 respectively in the years [redacted phone]. In total 1195 injuries were recorded in the same year. The figures for fatal, serious and slight continued a steady climb in [redacted phone] accounted for 72, 244and 1066 respectively, showed an increase in the overall injuries to about 1382. The numbers experienced notable rise in crime rates after one-year period soared to 95, 392, 1390 for all the three categories, with the total of 1877.

Turning to the specifics of [redacted phone], data reveals a gradual dropped to 80 for fatal, however the numbers for serious and slight injured rose significantly to 416 and 1683 respectively, highlighting total of 2179 in the same year.[redacted phone] marked dipped in numbers of fatal up to 68, whereas serious and slight injured rose to 437 and 1862 respectively, highlighting

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the data, including trends and comparisons. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical, listing figures chronologically rather than synthesizing the data into clear, overarching trends. The summary is incomplete as the text ends abruptly mid-sentence, failing to provide a full overview of the final years of the period. While the key features are identified, the lack of a complete conclusion and the reliance on listing data points rather than grouping them effectively limits the score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, and there is a logical progression from the overview to the detailed body paragraphs. Cohesive devices such as 'Moving into the details' and 'Turning to the specifics' are used to signal transitions. However, the referencing is occasionally unclear, and the abrupt ending of the text significantly disrupts the flow and coherence of the final section. The use of cohesive devices is sometimes repetitive, and the overall structure feels slightly disjointed due to the incomplete nature of the final paragraph.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task, with terms like 'mortality rates', 'notable rise', and 'soared' used appropriately. However, there are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'fatal rates' instead of 'fatality rates' or 'fatalities', and 'slightly injured' used as a noun phrase. Some collocations are imprecise, and the repetition of 'highlighting' and 'accounted for' suggests a limited range of functional vocabulary for describing statistical trends.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb forms and prepositions, such as 'gradual dropped' instead of 'gradual drop' and '19998-1999' (a typo). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods and commas. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors, combined with the incomplete final sentence, indicates a lack of control over complex structures.

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