Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The table show the number of fatal , serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

In 2004 to 2005, Britain crime increase by a large number. In which serious, fatal and slight crime list.

However ,In 1998 to 1999 crimes are very less in number. Then it increase day by day .

Although, In 1998 to 2007, the slight crime percentage was more as compare to fatal or serious crimes.

All over , In 1998 to 2007 , gun and knife crimes over all percentage was 194% .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While the introduction attempts to paraphrase the prompt, the body paragraphs are underdeveloped and lack a detailed analysis of the data provided in the table. The student identifies some general trends, such as the increase in crime over the period, but fails to report specific figures or make meaningful comparisons between the categories (fatal, serious, slight). The conclusion is also quite brief. To improve, you must provide a more comprehensive overview of the data, including specific statistics for each category and year, to ensure all parts of the task are fully addressed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organized into short, disjointed paragraphs. There is a lack of logical progression between ideas, and the use of cohesive devices is minimal and often misused (e.g., 'In which serious, fatal and slight crime list'). The transition between the introduction and the body is abrupt, and the lack of linking words makes the text feel like a list of disconnected observations rather than a cohesive report. To improve, use a wider range of linking words such as 'furthermore', 'in contrast', or 'consequently' to connect your sentences and paragraphs more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive, relying heavily on words from the prompt. There are noticeable errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'crimes are very less in number' instead of 'the number of crimes was very low' and 'slight crime percentage was more' instead of 'the percentage of slight injuries was higher'. The range of vocabulary is limited, which restricts the ability to describe the data with precision. Expanding your vocabulary to include terms like 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'significant rise', and 'proportion' would greatly enhance the quality of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The table show', 'crimes... increase'), incorrect tense usage, and awkward sentence structures (e.g., 'In which serious, fatal and slight crime list'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas. The range of grammatical structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and practicing the use of complex sentences to provide more detail and variety in your writing.

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