Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The table provides data on the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries happen in a crime which includes gun and knife, in Great Britain from the period of 1998 to 2007. It also shows the increase for each degree if injury over the period. There is no record of serious and slight injuries for the last year.
Overall, the rate of crime was increased with the period of time. Where, slight injuries were the highest every year, and fatal injuries were the lowest. Serious injuries are somewhere in between fatal and slight.
Rate of crime with fatal injuries increased slowly from 1998 to 2003, where the number goes down from 80 to 68 from 2003 to 2004, but it goes up again between 2004 to 2005. However, number of crime with fatal injuries stayed under 100. Whereas, serious injuries never got lowered than 150. It rose continuously over the years, crossing 450 number of injuries from 2005 to 2006.
On the other hand, cases with slight injuries were never low in numbers. Starting with 653 cases in 1998, the number rose rapidly to 3296, from 2005 to 2006. Which is the highest recorded till then.
Overall, the percentage of crime increased in all cases with 18% increase in fatal cases, 194% increase in serious, and 405% increase in slight cases. Total increase recorded including all cases was 342%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all parts of the task, including the main features and comparisons. You successfully identified the trends for each injury category and included the percentage increases provided in the table. However, the overview is slightly weak; while you mention that crime increased, you could have more explicitly highlighted the contrast between the relatively stable fatal injuries and the dramatic surge in slight injuries. The data is generally accurate, though the phrasing 'number goes down from 80 to 68' is a bit informal. To improve, ensure that your overview synthesizes the data more effectively rather than just listing trends.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is logically organized into paragraphs, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs focusing on specific categories. Cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'On the other hand', and 'Whereas' are used to guide the reader. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally imprecise, such as in the sentence 'Which is the highest recorded till then', which is a sentence fragment. Improving the flow between sentences and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer to previous nouns would enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fatal', 'serious', 'slight', and 'percentage increase' correctly. There are some instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'happen in a crime which includes gun and knife' and 'never got lowered than'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your writing. To reach a higher band, focus on using more sophisticated collocations and avoiding repetitive structures when describing numerical trends.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. For example, 'injuries happen in a crime' should be 'injuries resulting from crime', and 'number of crime' should be 'number of crimes'. Additionally, there are issues with article usage and verb tense consistency. While these errors rarely impede the overall meaning, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and ensuring that your complex sentences are punctuated correctly to improve your accuracy.
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