Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This diagram illustiate the great britian-gun and knife crime statistics in [redacted phone].In [redacted phone] year the fatal is 49,serious is 162,slight is 653 and total is 864.In [redacted phone] the fatal is 62,serious is 200,slight is 933 and total is 1195.The year [redacted phone] the fatal is 72,serious is 244,slight is 1066 and total is 1382.In [redacted phone] the fatal is 95,serious is 392,slight is 1390 and the total numbers is 1877.Than [redacted phone] the fatal is 80,serious is 416,slight is 1683 and total is 2179.

In [redacted phone] the fatal number is 68,serious is 437,slight is 1862 and after total is 2367.The year [redacted phone] the fatal number is 77,serious is 411,slight is 3424 and total is 3912.Year [redacted phone] degree of injury fatal is 49,serious is 476,slight is 3296 and total is 3821.The last year the fatal is 58 and others is empty.Percentage increase betweeb these years is fatal 18,serious is 194,slight is 405 and the total is 342.

This procedure shows, the great Britian-Gun and Knife crime ststistcs.The starting year is 1988 and last year is 2007.In last step wo discuss the percentage of all years.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarise the data provided in the table regarding gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007. However, it fails to present a clear overview of the main trends or make meaningful comparisons, instead listing raw data year by year in a mechanical and repetitive fashion (e.g., 'In 1988-1999 year the fatal is 49...'). Furthermore, the dates provided (starting in 1988) deviate from the stimulus (1998). Because the response merely recounts numbers without synthesizing the information or highlighting key features, it aligns with the Band 5 descriptor for Task Achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text is divided into three short paragraphs, showing some basic attempts at organisation. However, there is no clear overall progression or logical structure, as the body paragraphs read like an unedited list of figures. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused (e.g., 'Than 2002-2003', 'In last step wo discuss'). Referencing and transitions between sentences are weak, causing the writing to feel disjointed. Paragraphing is also irregular. These features place the response firmly at Band 4.0 for Coherence and Cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and limited to fundamental terms like 'fatal', 'serious', 'slight', 'total', and 'percentage'. There are several word choice and spelling errors (e.g., 'illustiate', 'great britian', 'betweeb', 'ststistcs'). The writer makes virtually no attempt at less common lexical items, and the misuse of basic functional language restricts the range. This demonstrates a limited vocabulary that struggles to convey precise meaning, corresponding to Band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical structures are extremely simple and repetitive, relying heavily on redundant subject-verb constructions like 'the fatal is...' and 'the fatal number is...'. There is a complete lack of complex sentence forms, and punctuation is frequently omitted or misused (e.g., missing spaces after periods). Errors in grammar and tense usage are frequent and systemic throughout the text (e.g., 'In 1988-1999 year', 'In last step wo discuss'), which heavily impacts the readability of the response. This performance fits the Band 4.0 criteria.

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