Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The table provide information about fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and sharp things that relarted to crime in great britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of the injury over the period.
Overall, it is clear that the major accident or the injuries held in year [redacted phone]. maximum had a slight accident was 3424. and the serious accident amount is mainly was 411. As we can see that the in year of [redacted phone], had a 653 slight accident and the total number of accident was 864.
In contrast, with year [redacted phone], the slight accident are incrising wisely and the number was 933.
secondly, the chart shaws that the slight accident are rose in every year and each year the most off the highest accident number is mainly the slight accident. The number of fatal accident are decreasing from year [redacted phone] to [redacted phone].
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarise the table by reporting some figures, such as '3424' for slight injuries and '411' for serious injuries. However, the overview is confused, incorrectly pointing to the year 2004-2005 as the time when major accidents were held, which does not reflect an accurate synthesis of the data. Furthermore, the selection of data points is somewhat random and lacks a cohesive overview of the main trends across the decade. Comparisons between gun and knife crime or across the different degrees of injury are missing or poorly expressed. This aligns with a Band 5 performance, as the task is addressed only partially and key features are not fully or accurately reported.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is broken into short, disjointed paragraphs that lack clear logical progression. While basic cohesive markers like 'Overall', 'In contrast', and 'secondly' are attempted, they are used mechanically and often inappropriately, such as beginning a new paragraph abruptly with 'secondly'. Referencing is frequently unclear (e.g., 'the major accident or the injuries held in year 2004-2005'). Paragraphing is poorly controlled, with single-sentence or fragmented blocks rather than well-structured thematic sections. This corresponds to a Band 4.5 or Band 5 level of organisation.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, relying on imprecise terms such as 'the major accident or the injuries', 'slight accident', and 'thing' instead of precise lexical items related to crime statistics. There are several awkward collocations and word choice errors, such as 'incrising wisely' (likely meaning rising steadily) and 'the most off the highest accident number'. Attempts to use less common vocabulary are unsuccessful. Spelling and lexical control remain limited throughout, placing this firmly in the Band 4 range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak, with frequent basic errors that interfere with communication. Examples include subject-verb agreement errors ('The table provide', 'the slight accident are incrising'), incorrect article usage ('the in year of 1998-1999'), and poorly formed sentence structures ('maximum had a slight accident was 3424'). Complex sentence structures are attempted but fail due to severe structural breakdowns. The range of structures is limited mostly to faulty simple or attempted compound sentences. This reflects the descriptors for a Band 4.
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