Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The given chart inform us about the number fatal, serious and slight injuries from gun and the knife crime in great britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Over all we see the largest fatal from the list is in 2001 to 2002 it is 95 and 392 serious,1390slight and 1877 is totalof it.

In the 1998 to 1999 the fatal on his lowest point it is 49 and its total is 864. Between 1999 to 2000 the serious is 200 and slight 933. When we see the [redacted phone] and [redacted phone] we see the big difrence between them the total is 1382 in first year and in the second year it increased upto 1877. In the [redacted phone],[redacted phone],[redacted phone] and [redacted phone] the fatal go to down and the total increased rapidly up to 3821 because in the pluse of slight. The only fatal is mentian in the 2006 to 2007 it is 58 and % inceased 98/99-2005/06 or the [redacted phone].

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the prompt by discussing figures from the chart, such as mentioning the peak in 2001 to 2002 with 95 fatal, 392 serious, and 1,390 slight injuries. However, the student struggles to select and report the main features effectively, providing a fragmented and largely random sequence of figures rather than a structured overview. The attempt to describe percentage increases is incomplete and unclear near the end of the text. Furthermore, there are misinterpretations of the data, and key comparative trends across the 1998-2007 period are omitted or poorly articulated. This performance aligns closely with Band 4 descriptors, where information is presented minimally and lacks a clear, coherent overview.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text lacks clear overall progression and logical organisation. The response is written as a single block of text with virtually no paragraphing, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, resulting in disjointed sentences. For instance, transitional phrases between years are clumsy, such as 'When we see the 2000-2001 and 2001-2002 we see the big difrence between them'. The referencing of data points is frequently unclear, causing confusion regarding which year or category a specific figure belongs to. This level of organisation corresponds to a Band 4, where information is not arranged coherently and progression is lacking.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The student uses a very basic and repetitive vocabulary range, heavily relying on simple terms like 'fatal', 'serious', 'slight', and 'total'. There are numerous word choice and spelling errors throughout the text, including 'inform' instead of 'informs', 'difrence' instead of 'difference', 'pluse' instead of 'plus', and 'mentian' instead of 'mentioned'. Collocations are frequently unnatural, such as 'the fatal on his lowest point'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic topic of injuries from crime, the frequent errors and restricted range place this response firmly in the Band 4 category, where vocabulary is basic and errors frequently strain the reader's comprehension.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple and heavily flawed complex or compound sentences. There are constant errors in basic grammar, including subject-verb agreement ('The given chart inform us'), article usage ('the knife crime in great britain'), tense consistency, and punctuation. Many sentences are run-on structures or fragments, such as 'The only fatal is mentian in the 2006 to 2007 it is 58 and % inceased 98/99-2005/06 or the 2006-2007.' These frequent grammatical errors cause significant strain and occasional distortion of meaning, which matches the Band 4 descriptor where errors are frequent and grammatical control is weak.

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