Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the table presents the number fatal, serious and slight injuries consequently from a gun and knife crime in great britain over the period from 1998 to 2007 and the rate exceed for the extent of injury through out the period.

overall, the highest ratio of injury was held in year [redacted phone], followed by [redacted phone] stood at the second highest year for injuries, meanwhile the lowest proportion was recorded in [redacted phone].

in [redacted phone], 77 fatal cases were recorded by gun and knife, however, 411 serious injuries took place, followed by slight injury which was 3424 in numbers and overall 3912 crime ratio was recorded. significantly, 49 cases were accounted fatal, 476 were serious and 3296 were slighlty injured over the second highest period [redacted phone] and the total cases were 3821.

by contrast, from the period 1998, which presented the lowest record of the crime, recorded 49 fatal crime, 162 serious crime where as 653 were slightly injured, which was 864 total cases.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response attempts to address the prompt by summarising data from the table regarding gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007. However, there are significant data retrieval errors and confusion regarding the years and figures. For instance, the student writes 'in 2005-2007... 3424 in numbers', which mixes up data from the 2004-2005 row and the percentage increase column. Furthermore, the overview mentions 2004-2005 as having the highest ratio, but misinterprets several other data points. While an overall trend is attempted, the selection of data is flawed and inaccurate, leading to a partial and confusing coverage of the task requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure, beginning with an introductory paragraph, followed by body paragraphs and an attempt at an overview. However, progression is frequently disrupted by confusing references and inaccurate data linkage. Paragraphing is rudimentary, with sentences lumped together without clear logical sequencing. Cohesive devices are minimal or repetitive (e.g., 'followed by', 'significantly', 'by contrast'), and referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information across the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The lexical range is limited and frequently inaccurate. The student makes several word choice and collocation errors, such as 'number fatal', 'rate exceed', 'extent of injury', 'crime ratio', and 'slighlty'. Some vocabulary is attempted to describe the trends, but incorrect forms (e.g., 'exceed' instead of 'increase') and spelling errors impede communication at times. The repetition of basic terms ('injury', 'cases', 'recorded') further restricts the lexical score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex structures are frequently faulty or awkward, such as in the opening sentence: 'the table presents the number fatal, serious and slight injuries consequently from a gun and knife crime...'. Punctuation and capitalization are completely ignored throughout the text. Errors in tense, preposition usage, and word forms are frequent and often cause difficulty for the reader.

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