Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.0)

this diagram illustrate that , Increase in the number of the street crime in the United kingdom from 1998 onward to 2007 , The Crime that will be done with the help of Knife and Gun's.

As According to the Static graph the number of the injury increasing gradually ,as we can there is the large number of the injuries , and there as you can see the number of slight injuries increase more then the other injuries .

So that in the given information we see that the Percentage of the different injuries that is happened to the people of the Britain .there is large incline in the injuries that is happened that is near about the 350 .

in the time period of the years the number of the injuries increases by large number. The are slight issue that are increases rapidly .so we have to check on them

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task by discussing gun and knife crime statistics in Great Britain, but it falls significantly short of a satisfactory overview. While the student mentions slight injuries increasing more than others and notes an overall upward trend, key data points from the table (such as specific years or accurate totals) are missing or incorrectly cited. Furthermore, the final sentence drifts into personal commentary and advice ('so we have to check on them'), which is inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 response. The selection of main features is very limited and poorly supported by accurate data from the visual prompt, resulting in an underdeveloped response that aligns with a Band 4.0 descriptor.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The organization of the response is extremely weak. The text lacks proper paragraphing, consisting instead of a series of disjointed run-on sentences that make the progression of ideas difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are either misused or absent, and referencing is poor, particularly with phrases like 'the same' and fragmented introductory clauses ('So that in the given information we see that...'). There is no clear logical structure separating an introduction, overview, or detailed body paragraphs. This lack of coherent arrangement and cohesive control places the response firmly at Band 4.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, frequently relying on simple terms such as 'number', 'injury', and 'increase'. There are numerous word choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'Static graph' instead of static table, and 'the Crime that will be done with the help of Knife and Gun's'. Less common vocabulary is attempted with poor control, and basic spelling and punctuation errors are frequent throughout the text. The lexical range is minimally adequate at best for basic communication, matching the criteria for a Band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying almost entirely on faulty complex or compound structures joined by comma splices and conjunctions. Sentences such as 'this diagram illustrate that , Increase in the number of the street crime...' demonstrate a fundamental lack of control over basic subject-verb agreement and clause structure. Punctuation is used incorrectly with spaces before commas, and frequent errors in tense and article usage impede overall readability. The majority of sentences contain grammatical errors, reflecting a Band 4.0 performance.

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