Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The table elucidate the quanitity of fatal, serious and slight injuries conclusions from gun and knife crime in great britain from 1998 to 2007 and the ratio jump for each degree of imjury over the time.

In an overview, 2005 to 2007 is crime ratio are gradually increase and reach 98 top 99%. The fatal catagory is lowest in 1998 to 1999 and higest is slight in 2006 to 2007.

The fatal catagory in 1999 to 2000 is increase and reach 62. Moreover the fatal catagory is increse in 2002, after the year the fatal catagory is slightly decrease and reach 58 in 2006 and 2007. Furthermore the second catagory is serious in 1998 to 1999 is 162 and slowly increase and reach 392 in 2002 to 2003, the serious catagory is gradully increase all the year and reach 476 in the year of 2005 to 2006.

In addition, the slight catagory is increse allthe year, At the end the slight catagory is 3296 in the year of 2006 to 2007. Total degree of injuree year is 2005 to 2006 .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarise the table by mentioning fatal, serious, and slight injuries, but it fails to provide a clear or accurate overview, stating confusingly that '2005 to 2007 is crime ratio are gradually increase'. There are also several factual inaccuracies in data reporting, such as misinterpreting the table's contents and percentages. Key features like the overall totals and the significant jump in slight injuries are poorly articulated. This corresponds to a Band 4.5/5.0 descriptor profile, where the task is addressed only partially, and information is under-developed or inaccurately reported.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, including an introduction and body paragraphs. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow due to poor logical sequencing and frequent grammatical errors that obscure the relationship between ideas. Cohesive devices are minimal and mechanical (e.g., 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', 'In addition'), and referencing is often unclear. Paragraphing is attempted but lacks effective management. This fits Band 4.0 descriptors for organisation and cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

Vocabulary is very basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors ('elucidate' used instead of 'illustrates', 'quanitity', 'imjury', 'catagory', 'higest', 'increse', 'injuree'). The student struggles with word choice and collocations, often misusing terms or inventing word forms. While the topic is related to crime statistics, the limited control over lexical items impedes communication in places. This meets the criteria for Band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the response. There is a very limited range of structures, and almost every sentence contains severe errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, and word formation (e.g., 'The table elucidate the quanitity...', 'is crime ratio are gradually increase', 'the slight catagory is increse allthe year'). Complex sentence attempts are faulty, and errors frequently cause strain and difficulty for the reader. This corresponds to a Band 4.0 level.

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