Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The data illustrates the three types of injuries with gun and knife in great Britain in 1098 to 2007. These three types of injuries such as fatal, slight, and serious grow over the period.
The numbers of slight injuries were higher than fatal and serious injuries throughout the period.At the start.It stood at 653.At the end, it reached 3296.The numbers of serious injuries in great Britain were lower than slight injuries. 1998 to 1999,the serious injuries were 162.The numbers of serious injuries were climbed dramatically and reached 476 in [redacted phone].The numbers of fatal injuries were lesser than others throughout the period.At the start,it stood at 49 and at the end it reached 58.The numbers of injuries were 342 in total.The slight injuries were greater than others in total injuries.The serious injuries were lesser than slight injuries in total.it was 194 in total.The fatal injuries in total were 18.Fatal injuries were lower in numbers than others throughout the period.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover the main features of the table, noting the categories of injuries (fatal, serious, slight) and their general upward trend, as well as providing overall percentage increases. However, there are significant factual and numerical errors; for instance, the writer states the initial year is '1098' instead of 1998, misquotes data points (such as ending slight injuries at 3296 instead of mentioning the final year's data correctly), and struggles to accurately report the percentage increases provided at the bottom of the table. Furthermore, the overview lacks precision and the data reporting is somewhat disjointed. This aligns with Band 5 descriptors, where the task is addressed only partially and some details are inaccurate or underdeveloped.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response suffers from severe issues with paragraphing and mechanical cohesion. The text is clumped together into one block after a brief introductory sentence, lacking clear paragraph breaks between the introduction, body details, and overview. Sentences are often very short, repetitive in structure ('The numbers of...'), and lacking smooth transitions. Cohesive devices are minimal or misused, and referencing is sometimes unclear, which impedes the logical flow. These characteristics match Band 4, where information and ideas are not arranged coherently, though there is a rudimentary attempt at organisation.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple words and exact repetition of terms from the prompt, such as 'injuries', 'serious', 'fatal', and 'slight'. There are also lexical and typographical errors, such as writing '1098' instead of '1998'. Attempts to use less common vocabulary are virtually absent, and collocation is limited. This reflects Band 4, where vocabulary is basic and repetitive, and errors occasionally strain the reader's understanding.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The student demonstrates a very limited range of sentence structures, relying almost entirely on simple sentences with repetitive subjects ('The numbers of...'). There are frequent punctuation errors, such as missing spaces after full stops ('At the start.It stood...'), capitalization issues (e.g., 'great Britain'), and grammatical slips in verb tenses ('the serious injuries were climbed'). Complex structures are not successfully attempted. This corresponds to Band 4, where the range of structures is very limited and grammatical errors are frequent.
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