Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The table provides data about the numbers of fatal, severe and minor wounds resulting from gun and knife offense in Great Britain between 1998 and 2007 and the ratio rise for each degree of injury over the time period.

Overall, the table reveals the numbers of fatal were at a peak from 200 to 2001 and the lowest numbers of fatal were [redacted phone] and 2005 to 2006. While the serious injuries resulting from crime in 2001 to 2002 was highest proportion, and slight injuries were highest ratio in [redacted phone]. In the last years there were no injuries recorded over the time period of ten-years

In the 1998, there were a smallest numbers of fightings, and injuries was just 864% in total which increased which surged substatially and reached at 3821 till 2006.

In [redacted phone], there were 58 fatals but no one found injured from gun and knife crime. The percentage increased by 18% in the number of fatals while the ratio of serious and slight injuries decline marginally over the time period.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response attempts to address the prompt by summarising the data from the table regarding gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007. However, there are significant misinterpretations of the data, particularly regarding the year 2006-2007 where the student claims 'no one found injured', despite the table showing dashes indicating missing data rather than zero values. Furthermore, the overview is somewhat disjointed and fails to clearly highlight the broader trends, such as the overall rise in total incidents. While some main features are reported, the lack of accurate data extraction and confusion over missing values pulls the task achievement score down.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organised into multiple paragraphs, attempting an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by confusing statements and poor referencing. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately (e.g., 'While the serious injuries...', 'In the last years...'). Paragraphing is present, but the internal cohesion within paragraphs lacks clarity, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information smoothly.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is quite limited and contains numerous unnatural collocations and word choices, such as 'severe and minor wounds', 'gun and knife offense', 'ratio rise', and 'small numbers of fightings'. There are also spelling and lexical errors like 'substatially' and 'fatals' used as a noun. While the student attempts less common vocabulary, the frequent inaccuracies and misuse of terms significantly impede precise communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, and attempts at complex sentences frequently result in serious structural errors and ungrammatical phrasing (e.g., 'the numbers of fatal were at a peak', 'injuries was just 864% in total which increased which surged substatially'). Errors in subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and prepositions are frequent and often cause difficulty for the reader.

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