Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.0)

This table perfectly demonstrate the fatal, serious and slight injuries results from gun and knife. The years involved Here it is 1998 to 2007.

Let's start the elaboration in the year 1998 to 1999 the crime commited enamourous including injuries fatal 49, serious 162 slight 653 and total is 864.

Now let's move forward to the year 1999 - 2000 the injuries involved again fatal 62 Serious 200 slightly affect number are 933 and the total for the given window is 1195

Now move forward to the year 2000 - 2001 here crime commited fatal is around 95, Serious 392, Slightly affected 1390 and the total is 1877.

so far the year 2002 - 2003 here also crime included fatal 80, Serious 416, slightly 1683 and total 2179.

now if we look the ata for the year 2003 to 2004 fatal is around 68, serious 437 and slightly 1862 and total is around 2367.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response fails to provide an effective overview or select and report the main features accurately. Instead of summarising the data, the student attempts to list row-by-row figures, but introduces significant factual inaccuracies and confuses the years and data points (e.g., claiming 'fatal is around 95' for 2000-2001 when the table shows 72). Furthermore, the response abruptly stops mid-way through the table data without covering the rest of the period or the percentage increases. This falls well short of the task requirements for Academic Task 1, earning a band score of 4.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The text lacks a logical organisational structure suitable for an Academic Task 1 report. The response is broken down into a series of informal, conversational paragraphs that repeat identical transitional phrases ('Now let's move forward to...', 'Now move forward to...'). There is no overarching progression or summary of trends, and referencing between years and data categories is frequently unclear or confusing. Paragraphing is rudimentary and conversational rather than structured for an analytical report. This corresponds to a band score of 4.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is extremely basic, repetitive, and heavily reliant on direct lifting or awkward phrasing from the prompt ('fatal, serious and slight injuries results from gun and knife'). The student attempts some less common words ('enamourous'), but uses them incorrectly both in spelling and meaning. There are frequent word choice errors, such as 'slightly affect number' instead of 'slight injuries'. This limited and inaccurate lexical control reflects a band score of 4.5, rounded to 4.0 or 5.0; given the strain caused by misuse, a band 4.0 is appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response displays a very limited range of sentence structures, consisting mostly of simple or poorly constructed run-on sentences ('The years involved Here it is 1998 to 2007'). There are frequent grammatical errors, missing verbs, incorrect prepositions, and punctuation flaws throughout the text (e.g., 'crime commited enamourous including injuries fatal 49'). Complex structures are either absent or attempt to use complex clauses that break down grammatically and impede smooth readability. This matches the descriptors for band 4.0.

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