Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The table provide information about fata, serious and little injuries that has been occurred in Great Britain by using Knife and gun from year 1998 to 2007 . The percentage increases every year slightly .
Over all the numbers has been rise through the year ,firstly taking about fatal incidents from 1998 to 2007 is in the year 2001 to 2002 , 95 approximately and least in year [redacted phone] is 49 approximately , Secondly, serious injuries has 476 most in overall years, however 2007 data has been not mentioned in table moreover in year [redacted phone] there were less serious incident recorded , moving up to next slight the most incident has registered in [redacted phone] but , [redacted phone] data has been not released and few cases is in the year [redacted phone], finally we can see 18% rise in fatal injuries , 194% in serious and 406% In slight furthermore 342%in total.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task by reporting several data points from the table, such as the peak and lowest years for fatal injuries and the overall percentage increases. However, the data presentation is disorganised and contains several inaccuracies, such as misinterpreting the peak for serious injuries and misquoting the percentage increase for slight injuries (writing 406% instead of 405%). The overview is weak, consisting of a very basic and fragmented sentence ('The percentage increases every year slightly'). The selection of main features lacks clarity, and key trends are poorly synthesised, which places the response firmly in the band 5 category for this criterion.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The text suffers from significant cohesion and referencing issues. It lacks proper paragraphing, presented instead as two dense blocks of text that do not logically separate the introduction, body data, and overview. Cohesive devices are either missing, misused, or overly simplistic, relying heavily on informal linking phrases like 'firstly taking about' and 'Secondly'. The overall progression of ideas is difficult to follow because sentences run into one another without clear logical transitions. Referencing is also faulty in places, creating confusion regarding which year or category of injury is being discussed.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent word choice and spelling errors (e.g., 'fata' instead of 'fatal', 'little' instead of 'slight', 'has been occurred' instead of 'occurred', 'rise' instead of 'risen'). There are numerous mechanical errors in reproducing terms from the prompt, and the student struggles to employ less common lexical items accurately. While the core topic is discernible, the lexical limitations and spelling mistakes occasionally strain the reader's understanding.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. There is a very limited range of sentence structures, and attempts at complex sentences result in frequent major errors, such as fragments, run-on sentences, and severe subject-verb agreement issues ('The table provide', 'numbers has been rise'). Punctuation is also problematic, with comma splices and missing periods disrupting the flow. Error frequency is very high, with almost every sentence containing at least one noticeable grammatical inaccuracy.
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