Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.5)

there is the table which illustrates the GUN and Knife crime statistic in great britian from 1998 to 2007.

we have 3 type of injury caused by these crime, first is fatal in which number are not increased drasctically just incresed around 10 or less than for every one year.However we have serious and slight injury which incresed more than we excepted around 30 to 50 every year but in the slight it incresed by 300.Crime from knife and gun had been decresed from 2006 to 2007 as only around 58 peole injuryed from fatal accident which is the in the middle value however other injury didnt happened.In terms of percentage we can see around 18 percentage in fatal,194% in serious and last slight incresed by 405% which make total around 342 percent from 1998 to 2006.we also have last column which gives the total injury every year by combining all these injury

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The student attempts to summarise the data from the table regarding gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007, mentioning both individual injury categories and overall percentage increases. However, the response contains several inaccuracies and misinterpretations of the data, such as claiming that 'slight' injuries increased by 300 instead of referencing the percentage or actual figures accurately, and struggling to interpret the missing data points for 2006-2007. The overview is weak and lacks a professional academic tone. While the main features are touched upon, the lack of precision and under-developed reporting place this response in the lower band range.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The text lacks proper paragraphing, presented instead as a single block of text with a conversational and unstructured flow. There is an absence of logical progression and standard cohesive devices suitable for an Academic Task 1 report. Sentences are strung together using basic connectors like 'however' and 'and', and referencing is occasionally confusing (e.g., 'which make total around 342 percent'). The lack of a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and concluding overview severely limits the coherence of the writing.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and informal ('drasctically', 'peole injuryed', 'didnt happened'). There are numerous spelling mistakes ('britian', 'incresed', 'drasctically', 'excpeted', 'peole', 'injuryed') and word-form errors ('injury' instead of 'injuries', 'crime' instead of 'crimes'). The student attempts some task-specific terms from the prompt, but the lexical range is inadequate for an academic report, resulting in vocabulary that sometimes strains the reader's understanding.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response features a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and faulty attempts at complex clauses. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('number are not increased', 'injury didnt happened'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles ('there is the table'). Punctuation and capitalisation are also frequently neglected (e.g., starting sentences with lowercase letters, 'great britian'). These persistent errors impede smooth reading.

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