Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007.
The highest percentage of the slight injuries that is 405. The second number is the serious which is 194, and the third one is fatal stand on 18. While studying the fact there is different increase and decrease in the these three. The highest number of fatal serious and slight injuries in 2004 to 2005 which is 3912..Whilw the second highest number in the year of 2005 to 2007 which is 3821. Third one is 2367 it was in the year of 2003 to 2004. While looking the fourth number is 2170 which is in the year of 2002 to 2003, and the fiveth one is 1877 it was in the year of 2001 to 2002. The lowest number number was 864 in the year of 1998 to 1999. The second number 1195 which was in the year of 1999 to 2000, third in the year of 2000 to 2001 it was 1382.
The percentage of all these remain on 342. It is the great to understanding the report from 1998 to 2007, knife crime in Great Britain
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the prompt by reporting figures from the table, but the selection of data is erratic and confusing. For instance, the student focuses heavily on the percentage increase figures in the second paragraph ('The highest percentage of the slight injuries that is 405') rather than summarising the overarching trends or main categories effectively. Furthermore, the data reporting contains inaccuracies (e.g., stating the total for 2002-2003 was 2170 instead of 2179, and confusing years and totals, such as referring to the total 3821 as 'the year of 2005 to 2007'). There is a lack of a clear, coherent overview of the main features across the period.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The organisation of the text is weak and lacks a clear logical progression. The response is divided into three short paragraphs, but ideas within them are jumbled together without clear transitions. Sentences like 'While studying the fact there is different increase and decrease in the these three' fail to guide the reader effectively. Furthermore, referencing is frequently unclear, and cohesive devices are either misused or absent, making it difficult to follow the relationships between the data points presented.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The lexical range is extremely limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic vocabulary and numbers ('the highest number', 'the second number', 'the third one'). There are noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'fatal stand on 18' and 'it is the great to understanding the report'. Spelling and word formation are also flawed, including the typo 'Whilw' and the invented word 'fiveth'. These vocabulary limitations hinder communication and prevent precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences are simple, and attempts at more complex or multi-clause sentences are consistently faulty, such as 'The highest percentage of the slight injuries that is 405' and 'While looking the fourth number is 2170 which is in the year of 2002 to 2003'. Grammatical errors are highly frequent—including missing verbs, incorrect prepositions, and faulty subject-verb agreement—which significantly strains the reader and obscures meaning throughout.
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