Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In the given table, the table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007.
In the given table, from 1998 to 1999 the total injuries were 864, 49 fatal injuries, 162 serious injuries and 653 slight injuries.
From year 1999 to 2000, there is increase in the total injuries its 1195, the fatal injuries were 62, serious injuries were 200, slight injuries were 933.
From year 2000 to 2001, the total injuries were 1382, 72 fatal injuries, 244 serious and 1066 slight injuries.
From year 2001 to 2002, the rate of injuries increases by considerable margin, the total injuries were 1877, 95 fatal injuries, 392 serious injuries and 1390 slight injuries.
From year 2002 to 2003, 2179 were total injuries, 80 were fatal injuries, 416 serious injuries, and 1683 slight injuries.
From year 2003 to 2004, total injuries were 2367, fatal injuries were 68, 437 serious injuries and 1862 slight injuries.
In year 2004 to 2005, expand at a faster pace than last years, there is huge difference from last year, the total injuries were 3912, fatal injuries were 77, 411 serious injuries, and 3424 slight injuries.
From year 2005 to 2006, there is small decrease in total injuries, the total injuries were 3821, 49 fatal injuries, 476 serious injuries, and 3296 slight injuries.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarise the data, but it suffers from a major structural and strategic flaw: instead of selecting and reporting main features and making comparisons, it lists almost every individual year mechanically (e.g., 'From year 2000 to 2001... From year 2001 to 2002...'). Furthermore, the final year of data (2006-2007) and the overall percentage increase figures provided in the table are completely omitted. This amounts to a mechanical listing rather than an analytical summary, restricting the response to Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The essay lacks a logical overall progression and effective paragraphing. Almost every single sentence starts on a new line or forms its own micro-paragraph, resulting in a disjointed and repetitive structure. Cohesive devices are extremely basic and mechanical, relying heavily on repetitive time markers such as 'From year... to...' at the beginning of nearly every sentence. There is no clear overview paragraph grouping trends logically together, which negatively impacts the flow and readability.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and heavily dependent on copying the prompt's exact words (e.g., 'fatal injuries', 'serious injuries', 'slight injuries', 'total injuries'). There is almost no attempt to use less common lexical items or paraphrase numerical data. Minor phrasing errors occur, such as 'its 1195' and 'expand at a faster pace than last years'. The lexical range is minimally adequate for conveying basic facts, but lacks precision and flexibility.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response contains numerous grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures. There are major issues with comma splices and run-on sentences, such as 'the total injuries were 864, 49 fatal injuries, 162 serious injuries and 653 slight injuries' lacking proper conjunctions. Tense usage is inconsistent, and auxiliary verbs are frequently missing (e.g., 'its 1195'). While a mix of simple and emerging complex structures is attempted, frequent errors cause noticeable strain for the reader.
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