Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The table campare,the data of fatal serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in great brtin from 1998 to 2007and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the peroid.

in 1998 to 1999 crime fatel 49 whic was seriuous in 162 whele slioght 653 in the total of number of 864 secondly 1999 to 2001 fatal 62 and 72 serious 200 and 244 whele selight 933 and 1066 in the year of 2001 to 2002 the fatal number was rise 95 and whle serious crime also rise the number was 392 and selight was also rise the amont of 1390

secondly the 2003 to 2004 fetal number was fail by 68 the serious crime was grow which was 437 and selight was also rise the number was 1683 and the tootal amount of the year 2003 to 2004 was 2179 and the year 2004 to 2005 fetal was incrase by 77 and serious was discrase by 411 whele selitght was rise by 3424

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response responds to the task only minimally, attempting to report data from the table regarding gun and knife crime in Great Britain. However, the information selected is presented in a very fragmented and confusing way, listing numbers mechanically without providing a clear overview or making meaningful comparisons. Furthermore, the report omits significant parts of the dataset, such as the final years and the percentage increase row, showing only a partial engagement with the source material.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

Information and ideas are not arranged coherently in this response. The text lacks logical organisation and clear progression, moving awkwardly from year to year with minimal overarching structure. Paragraphing is poorly handled, with a single massive block of text forming the second half of the essay. Transitional phrases like 'secondly' are overused and mechanical, and referencing between ideas is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on words directly copied from the prompt such as 'fatal', 'serious', 'slight', and 'injuries'. There are frequent spelling errors throughout the text, including 'campare', 'brtin', 'fatel', 'seriuous', 'slioght', 'selight', 'fail', 'grow', 'discrase', and 'tootal'. These lexical limitations and spelling mistakes strain the reader and reflect a restricted control of vocabulary suitable for academic writing tasks.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical range is very limited, relying on fragmented and poorly constructed clauses rather than complete, well-formed sentences. Errors are frequent and severely disrupt the meaning, such as missing verbs, incorrect prepositions, and faulty tense usage in phrases like 'the fatal number was rise' and 'fetal number was fail'. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing capitalisation at the beginning of sentences and run-on clauses that lack appropriate connecting structures.

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