Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The table illustrates the figures of different types of injuries reported from [redacted phone]. Between [redacted phone], number of injuries occured is less as compared to the time period [redacted phone].

During the year, less number of injuries happened comprises of only 49 fatal injuries. Moving forward, in [redacted phone] 95 fatal injuries were reported which is quite highest among all. After that, fatal injuries figures shows decline. Meanwhile, the number of serious injuries is also not less obvious yet, it is more in comparison with fatal one. A proportionate trend is seen in [redacted phone] and it constitues 437 serious injuries. During [redacted phone], no incident is reported in serious category. The most frequent injuries were observed in slight category, more in [redacted phone] and low in [redacted phone].

There is 18% in fatal, 194% in serious and 405% in slight injuries incresase in percentage has been observed, overall constituting 342 % increase.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response only partially addresses the task requirements. Furthermore, the length requirement is not met, as the response falls slightly short of the 150-word minimum. While the writer attempts to summarise the table by mentioning specific data points—such as the 49 fatal injuries in 1998-1999 and the percentage increases at the end—the selection of information is disjointed and fails to provide a clear overall picture of the trends. The overview is weak, and some figures are misinterpreted or stated vaguely, such as the claim that no incidents were reported in the serious category for 2006-2007 when the data for that year was actually blank. To reach a higher band, the response needs to fully cover all parts of the task with a well-developed overview and accurate reporting of the main features.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation to the response, but it lacks a clear overall progression. The writing is divided into a short introduction, a body paragraph attempting to describe various years, and a concluding sentence about percentage increases. However, the transitions between ideas feel abrupt and mechanical, such as moving arbitrarily from fatal injuries to serious injuries and back again without a logical structure. Cohesive devices are used minimally and sometimes inappropriately, such as 'Meanwhile' and 'After that'. Paragraphing is also poorly managed, as all body points are crammed into a single block of text rather than being logically grouped. To improve, the writer needs to structure the response with clear paragraph breaks and ensure ideas flow logically from general trends to specific data comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and barely adequate for the task, containing noticeable errors that occasionally hinder clarity. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary, such as 'proportionate trend' and 'constitues', but these are used inaccurately or with spelling errors. There are also awkward word choices and phrasing, such as 'less number of injuries happened comprises of only 49' and 'quite highest among all'. Repetition of basic terms like 'injuries' is also evident throughout the text. To achieve a higher band, the writer must expand their lexical range, ensure correct word forms and spelling, and use vocabulary with greater precision to describe statistical data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response displays a very limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple sentences and basic clauses. Attempts at more complex structures are frequently faulty, leading to noticeable grammatical errors. There are issues with subject-verb agreement and tense usage, such as 'number of injuries occured is less' and 'fatal injuries figures shows decline'. Additionally, articles and prepositions are mishandled in places, such as 'in fatal, 194% in serious and 405% in slight injuries incresase in percentage has been observed'. Frequent errors of this nature cause some difficulty for the reader. To improve, the writer should aim to produce a wider variety of complex sentences with better control over grammar, punctuation, and agreement.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.