Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The table chart illustrates the number of fatal, serious and slight injusries resulting from gun and knife in Great britain between 1998 and 2007 and percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.
Overall, the highest fatal injury happened in [redacted phone], however serious injury occured in [redacted phone]. The proportion of total injury and slight injury was highest in [redacted phone]. In contrast, there was no any serious and slight injury occured in [redacted phone].
In [redacted phone] the fatal, serious and slight injury occured from Gun and Knife crime was accounted at 49, 162 and 653 respectively, followed by by 95, 392, 1390 by [redacted phone]. In [redacted phone] fatal injury was plunged at 80%, however serious and slight injury was surged at 392 and 1390 respectively. The total number of crime happened was gradually increased over the period.
In addition, [redacted phone] serious and slight injury was went up at 437 and 1862. By [redacted phone] fatal was similar to the year [redacted phone] at 49%, while serious gradually increased to 476% and slight injury was plummeted to 3296%. Total number of injury propotianated at 3821%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response engages with the table minimally and presents a limited overview that is largely inaccurate. While the student attempts to highlight some statistics, many of the figures and trends reported do not align with the provided data, such as misinterpreting the percentage increases as raw counts or getting years confused. For instance, stating that 'fatal injury was plunged at 80%' or claiming that 'serious and slight injury was surged at 392 and 1390' demonstrates a misunderstanding of how to read the data correctly. Furthermore, key features like the overall totals and the percentage increase column are inadequately summarised, resulting in a response that fails to fully cover the main trends.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The response is organized into paragraphs, attempting an introduction, body paragraphs, and an overall summary. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted. Cohesive devices are used mechanically or incorrectly, such as 'In contrast, there was no any serious and slight injury occured in 2006-2007', which misinterprets the missing data in the table. Referencing between sentences is often unclear, and the overall arrangement lacks a smooth, coherent flow of information, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of data across the years.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with noticeable errors in word choice and word formation. Examples include 'injusries' (injuries), 'propotianated' (proportionated), and awkward phrasing like 'the highest fatal injury happened'. There are also frequent spelling and collocation inaccuracies, such as 'crime happened was gradually increased' instead of crime rates rising. While the range is sufficient to attempt descriptions of data, the errors and unnatural collocations occasionally cause strain for the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The grammatical structures are very limited, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that contain frequent errors. There are persistent issues with verb forms, tenses, and voice, such as 'serious and slight injury occured from Gun and Knife crime was accounted at' and 'fatal injury was plunged at 80%'. Prepositional errors and missing articles are common throughout the text. These frequent errors in grammar and punctuation can cause difficulty and confusion for the reader regarding the intended meaning.
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