Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The table chart depicts the information regarding the number of life threatening, critical and some minor wounds in Great Britain from weapons and daggers between 1998 and 2007.

As an overview, it can be noticed that the majority of the crimes took place during the period of [redacted phone] in which the minor injuries were accounted for 3424. Furthermore, the proportion of slight trauma was increased by 405% over the decade.

Firstly, it showed the great difference between the numbers of each crime from 1998 to 2007. It can be observed that the minimum proportion of wounded individuals in [redacted phone] were increased by 13 for fatalities, 38 for crucial and by 280 for bruises, respectively. Moreover, the numbers of criminal activities were rising for each category till the year 2002.

Secondly, it can be noticed that there is a slight decrease in trauma for life threatening injuries as it fell to 80 in 2003 and 68 in 2004, subsequently. Additionally, it can be observed that there is no slight and critical wound in [redacted phone].

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response covers some parts of the task, such as identifying the peak year of 2004-2005 and mentioning the overall increase in minor injuries by 405%. However, the selection of data is somewhat erratic and fails to provide a fully clear or complete summary of the main features across all categories. Furthermore, the final paragraph contains inaccurate information, claiming there are no slight or critical wounds in 2006-2007, whereas the table simply lacks data for that year. This partial and at times inaccurate reporting of the data restricts the development of the response, keeping it at a level where key features are under-developed or misconstrued.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The writing demonstrates some organisation, with an introductory sentence, an overview, and subsequent body paragraphs. However, there is a lack of clear overall progression and logical flow between ideas. Cohesive devices are sometimes mechanical or awkwardly used, such as the sequential transition words 'Firstly' and 'Secondly' which do not accurately map the logical structure of data comparison. Paragraphing is present, but the internal links within paragraphs are occasionally repetitive or unclear, resulting in a somewhat disjointed narrative that prevents the essay from achieving a smooth and logical progression throughout.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is limited and contains noticeable inaccuracies that occasionally cause confusion. The student attempts to paraphrase the prompt using terms like 'life threatening, critical and some minor wounds' and 'weapons and daggers', but these choices do not accurately reflect the precise medical categories of 'fatal, serious and slight' or the broader term 'gun and knife crime'. Additionally, there are awkward word choices and phrasing, such as 'minor injuries were accounted for 3424' and 'crucial' instead of serious. These lexical limitations and errors mean the range of vocabulary remains restricted to minimally adequate for the task.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response employs a limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple or faulty complex sentences. There are frequent errors in grammar, verb forms, and passive voice usage, such as 'were accounted for', 'were increased by 13', and 'subsequently' used where 'respectively' or 'subsequent years' might be intended. Prepositional phrases and article usage also show frequent inaccuracies, such as 'in 1998-2000' when referring to a range of years or events. These recurring errors require some effort from the reader to decode the intended meaning and reflect a restricted grammatical control.

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