Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The table presents the proportion of increase for each degree of injury over the period, the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in great britain from 1998 to 2007.
notably,slight injuries resulting from guns and knife crime in across the period , while fatal and serious display significant variation in frequency among the statistics.
In the fatal begin at 49 of injuries in 1998 to 1999 , while its start increasing year by year and peak at 95 in 2001 to 2002 and in, 2002 t0 2007 the degree of injuried crime being fluctuated till 2007. The percentage rose in 1998 to 2007 to 18%. The serious starts at 162 hurt crimes in 1998 - 1999 , whereas , its being increased significantly every year and at 2003 it was 437 of serious crimes and by next year it fall to 411 in [redacted phone] and again reached to 476 in 2005 - 2006. The total proportation of rose crimes in serious at 194%.
Conversely, the slight fun and knife crime statistics started at 653 damages and its being keep on increased till 2005 - 2006 at 3296 of crime damages and the total percentage increased is 405%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the prompt by presenting some information from the table, but the selection of data is incomplete and contains inaccuracies. The opening overview is poorly phrased and fails to clearly capture the main overall trends. While some specific figures are mentioned, such as the peak for fatal injuries and the final percentage increases, other data points are misreported or omitted. The description lacks a fully developed overview and fails to make all relevant comparisons between the categories. Furthermore, a portion of the text relies on copied elements from the task prompt, which is noted during evaluation. To reach a higher level, the response must present a clearer overview of the main trends and accurately report key data without omissions or confusing expressions.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response shows an attempt to organise information into paragraphs, but the overall progression of ideas lacks clarity. The text suffers from a lack of cohesive devices, and those that are used, such as 'whereas' and 'conversely', are sometimes clumsily placed or mechanically applied. Referencing between sentences is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information smoothly. The body paragraph is overly dense and combines multiple trends without adequate transitional markers or logical sequencing. To improve coherence and cohesion, the writer should ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic, use a wider and more accurate range of linking words, and maintain a logical, easy-to-follow structure throughout.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The lexical range used in the response is limited and minimally adequate for the task. The student attempts to use some less common vocabulary, but this frequently results in word choice errors, awkward collocations, and incorrect word forms, such as 'injuried crime', 'hurt crimes', and 'proportation of rose crimes'. There are also issues with basic word forms and terminology related to the visual data. While the meaning can sometimes be guessed, these noticeable lexical errors cause difficulty for the reader. To achieve a higher band, the writer needs to expand their vocabulary range and use precise terminology related to statistics and crime data while ensuring correct word forms and natural collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The grammatical structures used are very limited, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty. The text contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, missing articles, and awkward prepositional phrases. Examples include 'In the fatal begin at', 'its start increasing', and 'its being keep on increased'. Punctuation is also problematic, with incorrect comma placement disrupting sentence boundaries. These frequent errors cause significant difficulty for the reader. To improve in this area, the writer must work on basic sentence construction, ensure accurate verb tenses when describing past data, and reduce the frequency of structural errors by practicing simpler, more controlled sentence forms.
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