Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The table provides information about numerous fatal, serious and slight injuries caused by gun and knife crime in Great Britain during the period from 1998 to 2007.

Overall, it can be seen clearly that in all the injuries from fatal to slight injuries were increasing from the begining and reached at maximum level in the milddle of the period and it got a huge increase rate during the period.

At first in the year 98-99 the number of injuries caused by guns and knifes was 49 for fatal, 162 for fatal and 653 slight injuries and the number was at 864 combined. In [redacted phone]s the numbers for all the three sections was as follows fatal 62 serious 200 and slight 933 toal increased from 864 to 1195. In [redacted phone] fatal injuries increased by 10, serious injuries increased by 44 and slight injuries by only 129 and total upto 187 in quantity. In [redacted phone] the number was 95 for fatal injuries, 392 for serious injuries and 1390 for slight injuries and total number was at 1877. In [redacted phone] for fatal it was 80 for serious injuries at 416 and slight injuries was only at 1683 and total figure was 2179.

And for the next year it was 68 fatal injuries, 437 serious injuries and 1862 slight injuries

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the subject and include an overview, noting that the figures generally rose and that the total increased. However, the overview is inaccurate: the series did not all reach a maximum in the middle; slight injuries peaked at 3,424 in 2004–05, serious injuries at 476 in 2005–06, while fatal injuries peaked earlier at 95 in 2001–02. The report also stops after describing 2003–04, leaving the later years and the substantial overall increases unreported. There are factual errors, including calling 162 fatal injuries rather than serious injuries and giving the 2000–01 total as 187 instead of 1,382. Select the main trends and compare the categories accurately rather than listing early-year figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence, moving from an introduction and overview into year-by-year details, and phrases such as “At first” and “In 2001-2002” help signal chronology. However, the progression is largely a list of figures rather than a clear comparison of the main patterns. The overview is not developed into organised body paragraphs, and the final sentence ends abruptly without covering the remaining years. Some links are also unclear: “In 2000-2001 ... total upto 187 in quantity” does not clearly connect the figures to the table’s total. Group the information by meaningful trends or categories, use clear paragraphing, and ensure each paragraph has a complete purpose.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic vocabulary to communicate the general subject, including “fatal,” “serious,” “slight injuries,” “increased,” and “combined.” However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or repetitive. “Milddle of the period” is not an appropriate description of the peak, and “huge increase rate” is vague; the table reports increases in numbers, not a rate. “Fatal” is also repeated where you mean “serious,” which changes the information. Spelling errors such as “begining,” “knifes,” and “toal” reduce precision. Aim for accurate reporting language such as “rose steadily,” “reached a peak,” and “accounted for the largest share,” while checking spelling and category labels.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and the opening sentence communicates the topic clearly. However, control is uneven, with frequent errors in agreement, sentence construction, and punctuation. For example, “the numbers ... was as follows” should use a plural verb and a clearer construction, while “it got a huge increase rate” has an unclear grammatical relationship. The overview sentence beginning “Overall, it can be seen clearly that” becomes difficult to follow because several clauses are joined without clear structure. Some number lists also lack punctuation, making the relationships between figures harder to read. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and build longer sentences around one clear comparison at a time.

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