Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The table shows the compare between to type of crimes most popular and increas day by day the great Britain give the comparison between all the year started from 1998 to 2007. Additionally there are three type of crimes are most first one is falat and serious crimes most popular.

overall it can be observe that the degree of injuries by knife most popular rather than to the gun crimes because its slight crimes and a rate of silence crimes in 1999 rate 653 and total rate is 864. moreover in a recent year in 2005 to 2007 a fatal and serious or slight crimes also higher than to all pervious year a total rate of gun and knife crime is higher than to all previous year rate is 3912 it effect to all the previous years.

by 2006 in that year a crime rate also climbed up but lower than to 2005 a tatal percentage is also rises up in after 2000 it started from that and end on 2007 between those year every year a rate of crime crossed the line after every year

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the table’s broad subject and mention some relevant figures, including 653 slight injuries and a total of 864 in 1998–99, as well as the peak total of 3,912 in 2004–05. However, the response only minimally summarises the data: it does not clearly compare the injury categories or explain their overall changes across the period. The claim that injuries from knives were more common than gun crimes is not supported, since the table combines gun and knife crime rather than separating them. You also describe 2005–07 as having higher figures, although the total falls from 3,912 to 3,821 in 2005–06, and later category figures are unavailable. Select the main trends accurately and distinguish increases from declines.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure, with an opening, an overview-like paragraph and a final paragraph, and it attempts to connect ideas using words such as “Additionally,” “moreover” and “but.” However, the information does not progress in a clear, logical sequence. The opening repeats the task rather than establishing a focused summary, while the final paragraph returns to general claims about yearly increases without clarifying which figures are being compared. References such as “that year,” “those year” and “it” are unclear, and several sentences run together, making relationships between points difficult to follow. Organise the report around an overview and then clear comparisons of the categories or periods, using linking words only where they accurately show the relationship.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “fatal,” “serious,” “slight,” “percentage” and “total,” so the reader can recognise the subject of the table. However, the range is basic and several inaccurate or repeated expressions strain understanding. Phrases such as “most popular” and “rate of silence crimes” do not describe injury statistics appropriately, while “crossed the line” is vague and not a useful way to report a trend. There are also spelling and word-form errors, including “falat,” “increas” and “tatal.” Aim for precise data-reporting language, such as “number of injuries,” “accounted for,” “rose” and “declined,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts longer sentences and uses some time expressions, but grammatical control is weak and errors frequently make the intended meaning difficult to follow. For example, “The table shows the compare between to type” has problems with sentence structure, articles and number agreement. In “it can be observe,” the verb form is incorrect, and “a total rate … is higher than to all previous year rate” contains faulty comparison and plural patterns. Several sentences also lack clear punctuation or have clauses joined without a clear grammatical relationship. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses—for example, “The total rose from 864 in 1998–99 to 3,912 in 2004–05, before falling slightly.”

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