Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table shows the number of fatal, serious and slight injuries resulting from gun and knife crime in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007 and the percentage increase for each degree of injury over the period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Great Britain - Gun and Knife Crime statistics - 1998-2007

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The table illustrates statastics of crime accounted by gun and knife in Great Britain from 1998 to 2007. Crime has been distributed according to their degree of seriousness divided into 4 categories - Fatal, Serious, Slight and Total.

Overall, It is clear that Total crime in Britain increased over the time; specially, attacks causing slight injury were rose gradually with passing years. The total crime rate peaked in the period of [redacted phone]; however it was lowest at starting of the period.

Fatal injury causing crimes were remained almost similar during the period - commenced with 49 and reached 58 at the end, while it peaked in the middle of the period, reaching 95 in [redacted phone]. Serious injury, however, showed increasing statastics with time. It reached at peak in 2005-06 with 476 serious injury, though, a data from 2006-07 is missing. The degree of serious injury increased by 194%.

Now moving to the slight injury, it is the category which showed a striking rise in figures. the % increased over the period was 405, which itself is a proof showing great increment in the crimes causing slight injury. In time between [redacted phone], the number was 653, which was already maximum among the all types of injuries, that reached at 3296 by end of the period. The leading period was 2004-05 with 3424 slight injury and 3912 total crimes in the nation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main overall rise in totals and the particularly strong increase in slight injuries, and you support these points with relevant figures such as 653 rising to 3,296 and the 4, 2004–05 peak of 3,424. You also note the missing serious-injury figure for 2006–07. This covers the key features, but some comparisons are less fully developed: the total rose from 864 to 3,821 by 2005–06, while fatal injuries fluctuated rather than remaining entirely similar. The statement that slight injuries rose “gradually” overlooks the sharp jump between 2003–04 and 2004–05. A more precise overview and clearer comparison of the overall increase against the smaller fatal-injury change would strengthen the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate discussion of fatal, serious, and slight injuries. This makes the information easy to locate, and transitions such as “however” and “Now moving to” help signal shifts. The progression is generally logical, but some linking is mechanical or imprecise, and the final paragraph combines the percentage change, starting value, and peak figures without a smooth comparison. The overview also repeats the general idea of increase rather than setting out the main contrasts between categories. Use more direct links between related figures and ensure each paragraph develops one comparison consistently; this would make cohesion more flexible and the progression more polished.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “Fatal,” “Serious,” “Slight,” “peaked,” and “increased,” so the reader can follow the subject. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “degree of seriousness” and “striking rise.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural: “crime accounted by gun and knife,” “attacks causing slight injury were rose,” and “reached at peak” do not express the intended meaning naturally. Spelling errors such as “statastics” and “specially” also reduce precision. Aim for standard report language and accurate collocations, for example, “crimes involving guns and knives” and “the figure reached a peak.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, including contrast clauses with “however” and a relative clause in “the category which showed a striking rise.” Meaning is usually recoverable, but errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur across the response. Examples include “attacks … were rose,” “Fatal injury causing crimes were remained,” and “It reached at peak”; these should be recast with correct verb patterns, such as “attacks … rose” and “the figure reached a peak.” Capitalisation after full stops is also inconsistent, as in “the % increased.” Greater control of these basic patterns, alongside varied but accurate complex sentences, would make the report clearer and more fluent.

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